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please edit more carefully or use an editor
Exciting tale, but difficult to follow in part because of misused words and errors. Send future works to one of Literoticas editors or proof read at least seven times yourself before you send the story in. Here are a couple examples: "Her hands gently massaged the based on him" ; "I head was spinning, I was so turned on."; "The feels grew inside me". Small errors indeed, but disrupting to the reader.
Please do continue to write, your imagination and descriptions are hot!
Very sexy!
We really liked this story! Sounds a little bit like our own play and bit of what we would really like to do with a new playmate sometime. ;)
Great...
Loved it, and looking forward to more of the same
isn't that interesting
and wifey does this when he's not about, not a shocking thought. is she ok with him finding a nubile female for him?
Good story
Good story but should have been edited to remove numerous spelling and syntax errors. These errors disturb the flow of the story.
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