Mentioned on the new poems thread.
Nice touch of humor. Perhaps old Ceasar should have said:
I saw I conquered I came!
You got this very subtle point LeBroz, and I had to think this very important matter for quite some time! When, I was
I wondering, does the 'conquering' occur? I deliberated and put it where I did. Than again, maybe yours could have been just as right!
BTW, no worries about the self rating. There is a big sweeping machine you'all can't see which cleans every such indecent act! :)
better and better with each poem of yours I have read. This one has such a light hearted feel, truly enjoyable. keep up the good work :) and I did want to mention your lines- the rhythm is good, the syllable count really works with this poem.
your end (pardon the pun) made me smile....nice to read you again.
I went fishing through your poetry, and was lured in by this kick ass title. I love your work, .. and this piece could go alot of ways, .. legs up, legs down, bent behind head, ... okay .. you get the picture..
I saw I came I conquered!" This is definitely the sexiest inversion I've seen in a LONG time! Bravo!!!
Sometimes it feels as though you can not differentiate who has said what, as the two lovers (being as one) often merge in more than one way. Loved your playful way of approaching this, yet it still packs heat. Well done! ~JaneAusten
Sometimes the unpoetic is more poetic. Also the poetic tends to suck the heat out things.
How utterly relatable. Well done!
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