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Michelle's First Time

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by Anonymous

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by MilkChocolateAmazon03/30/08

Liked it

A good start. I hope there's more.

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by cinnamon_kisses1203/30/08

wow

I hope there's more

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by Amyfriend03/30/08

Very well done.

You captured it all in great detail, very well done, thanks.

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by Anonymous03/30/08

Consequences

I loved your story and encourage you to allow Jacop to suffer the consequences of his "rape" of a relatively innocent, young woman. He did not have the right to take what she had been saving. It is your choice right now while you are a new writer to decide if you are simply writing erotic "stroke" stories to give readers thrills, or if you want your stories to have meaning. What's the moral to your story? I'll enjoy your stories either way. However, you have the talent to become an awesome writer, if you choose.

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by Anonymous03/31/08

Previous commenter: Moral? Seriously? You've got some issues to work out.

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by Marines_Lady_1504/01/08

Oooo

I want to hear more of these two!

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by Anonymous06/02/08

Please write some more

More? More? Please can I have more? I need more! This is one of the best non consent stories I have read in a long time. Please continue this one

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by wildsoul08/08/11

is this the end?

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