Can't wait to keep reading!
Keep the story coming,I found myself checking for chapter 2 everyday since 1.
OMG!!.....I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!!!!!
Give me more! A page is not enough, you're driving me crazt here! Lol. This is so good. I'll be waiting (impatiently) for the next one! lol. Absolutely brilliant!
This story has just gotten better. You have a way of making it all seem so real. The characters are wonderful and so full that you can see them as real. I can't wait for 3. Thanks for the read.
Please, please update soon!
Please continue! This is great!
Your making a fab story.
please keep up the story, it has begun to take a life of its own. and i am truly begining to enjoy it.
I'm really enjoying this story...it's unique and creative. Thanks so much for posting two chapters in one day! I'm off to read chapter 2.
beautifully written cought my interest
I anm dutifully reading the chapters of your beautiful story in order, but did you HAVE to make the only reference to sex oral? Yuck and ugh!
The way you foreshadowed and referenced to the Chopin Nocturne because she'd actually heard the keypad was truly brilliant. You're an excellent author. Well done.
This is great, but I have to say that you don't move when you dream. It's during the REM stage and you are paralyzed. You cannot speak.
loved the second part too =-] ur a good writer -- i love ur imagination
This story was so interesting, I had to finish it , sadly I did not read the first part, this was sent to me by a friend. Is it possible to read the first part? I cant wait to read more!
this is a really interesting piece of literature and i'm really enjoying reading the series.
omg this story is so lovely; i'm falling for Cael lol
The comment about being paralysed while dreaming, there is disagreement about this and some commentators say we do move involuntarily during dreaming. People can speak even during the dream phase let alone during REM. I hate these commentators who come and stamp all over stories saying, 'no that is wrong, I am precisely right, you are foolish not to know that'. In this case it is not as clear cut as they make out, and anyway, it is fiction, it features vampires. Writers do not need nit-picking commentators who lack the ability to write anything decent themselves. That comment has angered me. Go back to some science website, anonymous, not here.
Yeah," she admitted. "I thirsted for stories when I was younger. Now I don't remember them as well," she admitted. "Life takes you from lusting for stories to making meaning on your own; making your own story." Suddenly she laughed bitterly. "Our plight is a true Greek tragedy."
that i one of the most brilliant thoughts i have ever witnessed and so well put love it and luv ur story xxxxx
I can't help it. 5 stars...
I just love this story, and all of your others. i have read this story many times, but i keep coming back to it hoping for more. So i will continue to enjoy what there is until then. thanks for all your hard work.
Even in the darkest hours you can find a light to help pull you through. Great chapter on to the next
This story is drawing me in.
That was very good. VERY good ending. See you at Ch.03.....
That was a vividly horrific beginning, but I liked that it was not her cellmate doing the crime but rather he comfited her. Very well written.
I like your writing, the story is very unique. You might describe what she is wearing and there is no reference to how she is coping with the cold and damp interior. I think if you were more descriptive it would paint a clearer picture. Keep up the good work!
....so far. It only takes three days without water for a person to die of dehydration. Minor, i know but the story is so well written, this small logistical issue is the only thing I can knit-pick, lol.
This is the best story. I cry every time I read it. Hope it will be finished one day.
Honestly, it's really hard for me to get into a story when there no sex in it yet. However, the plot is really good and I feel closer to the characters. Ur awesome:)!
In reply to anonymous. What is it about pitch black that you don't understand?
Your skill of captivating your reader (without sex) is nothing short of amazing!!!!!
That rape bit at the start was amazing! I love it when you said how her ass got ripped. Beautifully described. Little disappointed that it wss so short. I think you should write a full rape story. I know it would be great!
Um that's missing the point of how brutalized and traumatized she is. In any case, I love the characterization and I especially love Cael's pride bit. Very interesting!
Love your main characters!
Dream Flash back, well done
What a delightful little creature, "A fun perspective"
A code used to deciphered a safe's combination, accomplished through the remembrance of a melody, "believable WELL DONE"
Rape is not good. There is NO arguement for it. Just don't.
Love the pace and revelations.
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