All Comments on 'Cassandra and Her Mother'

"I was nervous. REALLY nervous. I was only 1, headed to my friend Cassandra's house ..."

I can understand mixing up your and you're, but having your main character be 1-year-old? Sloppy.

I noticed that mistake right after it was approved, and at that point it was too late to stop it.

Just imagine an 8 there since it's 18 in all the other parts of the story.

Sonny, if you are going to attempt to write a story about sex, at least do a little research. For example:

You have a high school senior virgin with raging hormones. He has an extremely painful erection which he has fought with for about 4 hours (excluding the few times may have been able to allow it to rest). He enters the young girl who is hot, willing and waiting. The following comment is totally ludicrous: I fucked her for a good fifteen or twenty minutes, bringing her off another three times, before I was ready to cum. Given the facts list above, 2 minutes would more likely be the time limit.

When you write something like the above, you show the world your lack of sexual experience.