A slight hint for u... Make the next ch longer & dirtier! Believe me, it can b dirtier & try a few different sexual positions 4 them.
not bad, you have some format errors which kind of killed it for me. But still good, as the other guy said... longer/dirtier.
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Not bad for your 1st try!
A slight hint for u... Make the next ch longer & dirtier! Believe me, it can b dirtier & try a few different sexual positions 4 them.
interesting
not bad, you have some format errors which kind of killed it for me. But still good, as the other guy said... longer/dirtier.
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