A Dom's Revenge Ch. 07

I made a prediciton with Chap 6 and it was right.

You followed formula and wrote as predicted. Isnt it great that switch teresa now is a slave to her master and a mistress to her subslave. I still dont recall that the subslave has ever had a medical to provide the information that she is not infected with some disease that will damage her and possibly the master. Safe, Sane, and Consensual are still the rules in BDSM. Anything else is just plain stupid and may be criminal.

Sir Smegma

This is definately something that was scraped off the end of a dick

idiotic

sheer gibberish

Pathetic

You are one sick MF.

Vile!

Admitting that I read the entire "story", much like one is fascinated by a serious accident, I think that this story is so vile that it crosses the line beyond which only truly evil intent lurks.

I wonder, in fact, how this passes legal muster. It is clearly obscene, serves no artistic purpose, and is far beyond customary standards. Beating someone half to death, until they are no longer sensate, is customary only for illegal gangs. I will assert that caning has a place...to punish illegal behaviour, such as in Indonesia, and to possibly chastise writers such as sirsemega.

Brilliant

Loved all of the chapters so far and hope you write more

Confused

I think the author is confused between BDSM and sadism. Either way, I don't think David's story should continue. Stop already.

love it

i hope eventually that girl will earn a place in the masters heart but it should be a hard road. i hope u keep writing.

Perfect!

This author & story gives some balance to the rest of the wimp husband story out there! Thank you for your efforts!

Sayonara to sirsemega writer of perfect crap!

There are some good mental institutes which could help treat your sadistic drives. Choose one, you need all the help you can get!

Finished or not

Are you going to continue this story or are you stuck for a plot?

Twisted...

...but I read all 7 chapters. Call me a romantic (haha) but I'd like to see slave go & girl to become his one & only.

Same old, same old

Boring.....no plot.....just an idot having a wet dream

I do give you credit for not erasing unflattering comments

to the haters

i noticed the negative comments had either no details or incorrect details. while predictable this was a good story. it's not hot and heavy but there is enough to keep me hooked for those 7 chapters, is the story going to get more intense as it goes? i hope it does,but please just finish it! even girl got her release in the end!

In response to "Confused"

I am sure that most people are intelligent enough to actually know what they are talking about when they respond with their opinions about a story. Personally the person who wrote the Confused one doesn't know the first thing about BDSM or they would know what it stands for at the very least.
As for the author. I personally read all 7 chapters and whereas it isn't one of my favorites and the intensity scares me. I do know that some people like it that intense. I think it was a pretty good story and I will read a few more of your stories before moving on. You are a good budding author and I wish you all the luck in future writings. Oh and kudo's to you for actually keeping the negative responses. It shows great personality and strength of character.

This is indeed the end of the story

To all you readers out there that have asked: this is the final chapter and the end of this story.
Thank you for reading it, commenting on it, and giving your opinion, good or bad!

an original idea

Your story was very intriguing to say the least. While I can not yet say that I loved it, I did enjoy it. It was very well written and had an interesting plot, that if you chose to, could be more developed with a longer story. My only critical comment would be about your characters. David in particular seemed like the most dynamic, but after a while I lost any sympathy I had for Him because of the constant 2-dimensional hatred He showed his ex-wife. Even if girl did cheat and break His heart, the revenge aspect seemed a bit extreme. It didn't make sense for Him to take her in. Other than that, excellent work. I will enjoy reading some of your other submissions!

I liked it..

and don't be offended by the negative comments. People love to hate things.

--phillygirl

LOVED IT

OMG!! I couldn't stop reading. I am having something similar (yet not so nearly as harsh) now. I gave my collar back to Master a year ago. He has agreed to take me back, however I have to earn that collar. He is extremely strict, and has told me he is "remolding me". Thank you for writing this story :)

Whole story good.

Whole story was good. More editing. Why do the writers here spend time writing and then ruin it by lousy editing?

Awesome!

This was really amazing! My Master wants to read this as I have said that it gives a few ideas on how to truly break down a slave. Well written. Good imagination.

You never got the help so badly needed...

So I skipped to the end and your David remained as sociopathic as he was in the beginning.

This is not power play, not domination, not even slavery. One can't give consent when they've been coerced and manipulated. This level of cruelty isn't sane, and clearly, there is nothing safe about what he did to his ex. This is dehumanizing, sadistic, torture for the sake of relieving one's bruised ego.

It's been some time since you wrote it. I wonder if you grew up at all?

Sad

This is a story for a true masochist. To me, it's just a tragedy.. nothing sexy about it.

Wow

This sucked and wasn't even completed. There's no such thing as a 'dinning' room - it's a dining room.

Au contraire, Anon 08/10/11

I have been in any number of dining rooms where the large number of boisterous diners have contributed to an unmistakable din. Dinning rooms are quite common.

forgiveness

I wanted to comment on your remark at the end of the story. You said you haven't decided weather David forgives his ex-wife. I would assert that you gave the answer to that earlier in the story when David was explaining how he was making the new slave personality hate what she had been in the past. Effectively pushing her previous self out. If she becomes the slave then he doesn't need to forgive the ex because that person no longer exist.

continue

By the time Girl gets herself up to being a Slave worthy of her Master, Wife should be completely gone from both His and Her thinking (or at least only a dim memory for him). If wife's still lurking (in her) Teresa will slap that memory and attitude back down.

insiteful

I agree sharing is a double edged sword I could never swing.

David forgivenis

become intimate with her hell, I think he should buy her a dog.

Just divorce her

This isn't a healthy relationship, it's a pile of horse shit.

It was a good story, thank you for writing.

I still do not care for or understand BDSM, a little dominance and submission I like, that's all. Not everything that is involved with the whole Master/Slave bit. I guess I am just too old and set in my ways, I am glad that this cheating wife was brought up sharply, she has paid and will pay further. They should all get about a month of this.

I would have to agree with the story!!

I thought it was great!! This story rocks!! If my ex came back to me, and I was as much of a hard dom as David, it would totally go this way!! But I am not a pain dom, so it would not go like that, and she would not come back to me anyway!! Thanks for writing this!! Awesome story!!

Pure fucking awful

please continue this line

please continue this line as it is showing me things that I've never dreamed of. seriously I read the whole thing in one night. please please continue :)

Understanding the Emotion !

I agree with the author on this story that there so many cheating wife stories. Is is refreshing to read stories were the wife gets some humiliation from the spurred husband.
So while I thought as first the treatment of the wife seemed a little harsh. What do not know from the story is what she did with her lover, how so humiliated her husband, why she left, and how she left ! ?

These factors will determine what happens to the girl ( the wife ) if there is a next chapter !

Personally I believe there is scope for more humiliating treatment of the slave. Perhaps David could have other Doms and their slaves over for a party. Were they could verbally humiliate the girl, other get sexual except her. Or David can invite other slaves for the weekend who play with him and first slave Teresa.
Eventually I think David will have some sort of relationship with the girl. However it will not be the same before she left with her lover !

Wickedly Aweful

Nice piece. Things I would consider.
Girl is now an investment and while the exercise is great, David might want to consider some surgical options. Secondly, girl should get a couple piercings as pRt of punishment. First, nipples then hood. I think David should consider inking her as well starting with putting cheating whore on her back neck and then some really nice artwork to make her something more pleasant to look at.
I would have Slave Teresa start her on a program as sex slave. Start with anal and oral mastery. Also why he doesn't make Teresa( arms behind her back) shower him in the turnings every day astounds me. As daily, routine - I would have Teresa both shower David and oral pleasure and clean him everyday. Maybe even start a daily routine with girl to nightly have Teresa do girl with a strap on before bed.

Good stuff. Can't wait for more.

two years since this Author added any more storys to thier profile

good writer , bit extreme for my taste .
but the storys are well crafted & in the most part an entertaining read.
those that are really into this , might consider sending the Author
some decent Feedback, nothing ventured , nothing gained ,
but i know that it can sometimes be the deciding factor.

the Author might just be busy ,
something unfortunate may have happened to them
& they no longer are able to write .....
BUT . sometimes ,feedback makes a diference
& it can encourage a good Author to return &share more with us .

Great story

This story needs to be finished!

I agree with your summation.

There is undeniable love for the slave and unless she is forgiven and loved again, you make the mistake of being worse than she was.