by nowiamhere
This story was pretty good, but I found that the main thing that could be improved was copyediting - the mistakes were misued words (e.g., "wondering" instead of "wandering") and not something that a spellchecker would catch, so just having another pair of eyes go over it would be best. These mistakes were distracting from the story.
Nice story' but did you even bother to proof read it? So many easily fixed errors that took away from the story.