All Comments on 'Jock vs Nerd'

please continue :]

You CANNOT leave it there. I NEED MORE NOW!!! Really good start, hope I don't have to wait too long until the next one.

I agree with the other comment posters here, there really should be a second part and quick!

This is so hot and a great piece of writing - you HAVE to continue it!!!

don't leave us hangin'!!

make another please don't leave it at that

!!!!!!!!!!!dude please finish it oh fuck !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Evil evil to leave off there, soo curious what is next.

Brah you have to finish this story?!

Is the quarterback going to join?!

Was the quarterback his past lover?!

WTF?!

Everything's hotter in the City of Angels! But please, as an avid American reader of literotica, I'm begging you to adjust some of the story's verbiage to keep it sunny-and-sexy in its proper Californication-location:

«Whilst» (in the States, we say «While» — likewise, we say «Among» instead of «Amongst»)

«Mind you» (that's way British-sounding; a Californian college student would more likely say «FYI»… and considering that Mike DiMarco is of Italian heritage, he very likely grew up with the withering Mediterranean idiom «not for nothing». «Not for nothin', but anyone would get excited about Ryan's ass.»)

«Goddam» (we add the final N — well, you wouldn't spell it «Dam you», would you?)

«footballer» (doesn't exist in the American vocabulary; that remains the European term for «soccer player». Although it's hilarious to imaginine David Beckham in the helmet, jersey, shoulder pads, and tightie-panties, running with the pigskin under his arm…)

«favour» (no U)

«shagging» (way British — a lot of us learned the term from the Austin Powers movies! — more authentic would «doin'», «tappin'», «bangin'», «screwin'»)

Please excuse the extra two letters in «imaginINe David Beckham» and the lack of verb in «more authentic would _ «doin'», etc.

Please make a second chapter !!!!!! I was so sucked in!!! Add another chapter! PLEASE!!

To confusing lol mike and mike lol

The cliffhanger is good, but there is still room for more story

:)