All Comments on 'Return of a Princess Ch. 01'

I like this story very much so far..you've set a good tone with this story line keep it going..

Looking forward to more.

I also enjoyed your first installment, can't wait until you put up part two.

can you continue? :) I would really like to know how this story is going to go.

your story is fantastic! but the spelling and grammer mistakes are a little off putting and makes it hard to concentrate on the story. but that is easily rectified, PLEASE continue to write, just read over your work.

story is great, creative, and fun; but i mean come on, does it hurt ot edit it a little. just a bit. if in need of an editor there are so many on this site willing to lend help. utilize it, it will make your stories much more enjoyable.

... but the run-on sentences and spelling errors gravely take away from your story. If you can't get an editor, perhaps re-read before posting to reduce the errors as much as possible. Don't be discouraged though, you're off to a good start, just needs a bit refining.

The story itself is very good, but it is hard to read because of many typos,misspellings and wrong word usage.

Love it. the end

Hi

Sorry to read that you quit because of so much negative feed back !!

:>((

I think that whike the story sounds a little like Snow White and the plot is somewhat obvious it is written fairly well.

I think it was a good start and I hope that you might re-consider and try a few more stories and see if your imagination and craft bring something better.

btw You ar correct your story is MUCH better than many others I've read at this site.

Hope you get this as you wrote these stories a few years ago.

Good luck VC