You suggested we bookmark this and I was preparing to do so, then I read your story. Before I knew it two hours had pasted, four orgasms, and a box of kleenex. This relationship and this story have rejuvenated this genre. I have read countless tales of bro and sis with little variation. The attention to detail was beyond the realm of excellent. Like the reviewer before me the rating system is not high enough for this "novel". Please, continue to write on this story line, we wanna know what happens next. While you did have a few grammatical/spelling errors the story was sound in that regard throughout.
by
Anonymous04/14/08
Great Story
Wow. Just Wow. Your work never ceases to amaze. Keep them coming. (no pun intended.)
by
Anonymous04/14/08
Good work
I've been waiting on this eagerly since October, and I gotta say it surpassed whatever i might have expected, I was however expecting the parents to walk in on them and was abit dissapointed when it didn't turn out that way. Anyways, I sure hope you will continue writing and I'm looking forward to reading it. You might however want to do some proof-reading because there where some gramatical errors and at some places missing words only minor mistakes though and ten thumbs up!
by
Anonymous04/15/08
An Update!
Skipped all the way to end to post this: already know it's going to be amazing!
by
Anonymous04/15/08
Simply Mindblowing
Wow is all i can say. Ive been waiting for this since ch.5 came out and ive got to say im impressed yet again. You could really be an erotic novel writer~!
by
Anonymous04/15/08
I think the awesomeness meter just broke...
...because there's just no way how awesome this chapter was. It was too awesome, that I read this whole chapter in it's entirety in one sitting, in a matter of 7 hours. If at all, I'm glad you ended this chapter with an open ended ending. I really do hope you continue with this series, because I just basically fell in love with these two siblings from the very beginning. Their revelations, in terms of their sibling relationship, struck me very hard in this chapter because I have a younger brother and sister, and an older step-sister, and even then, just the simple relationships of siblings really got me thinking that I should tread carefully in the long run.
Forgetting the genre (incest) at hand for a second, I think this story all comes down to just family, and I thank you for letting me realize how important family really is. I don't know if that was your intent in between the lines of your stories, but I definitely got that hint if you did.
Please, keep making more of these stories of Ashley and Brian, and keep up the good... no... excellent work!! :D
Another good JOB!!!. You just keep getting better and better as we go along. Keep up the good work and can't wait to see what comes next.
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Anonymous04/15/08
well done, very creative!
this is well written and it really shows how much thought you put into it shiggy. congratulations. no wonder you took so long in composing it!
good luck with the next chapter.
by
Anonymous04/15/08
wow. just wow.
This is probably one of the most thorough and well thought out story lines i've probably have read on here in any genre. most stories on here are generally 2 people fucking, wham,bam, thank you ma'am, end of story. This story however was like looking through a window into the lives of two people.
heres some issues i did have.
*Way too long of a build up to the climax. While i do appreciate a 6 part series, i really felt having 5 entries lead up to the 'sex' was a little much. After the 5th installment it was starting to become a bit tedious.
*some areas was a little over embelished. Especially the sexual encounters. I find it difficult after all the sexual encounters they were having that their parents would not find out. This installment has them getting a bit suspicious, i was hoping that there would have been more to that. LIke one of them finding out and them and the kids having a blow out over it. I also found it difficult for their freinds to be a little too accepting of their relationship. Unless they were going to use it as a power weapon against them. another line that could have been pursued in the series.
*possibility of a pregnancy. The story wasn't clear on if she was on some sort of birth control or not. All we got was 'don't worry i have it taken care of' to paraphrase. A possibility of going with this is having her get pregnant as a result. Maybe she gets intentionally pregnant to keep him from being in a relationship with someone else should things start to go south. it was hinted at in the story that she had a vindictive possesive personality when he wasn't there. It wouldn't be out of character for her to do that. Another story line that could have been pursued. I also wanted to see how this affects the development of their younger sister. Does she reject their behavior or does she embrase it when she comes of age?
I really would like to see a 7th and 8th installment doing deeper in to there relationship and the effects on their freinds and family. Really thats why i wanted to see the sex out of the way around installment 3 or 4 so the 5th and 6th installments could have gone deeper than what it ended at in the 6th installment. in other words story 6 really should have been story 3 of 4. This story is far from over. theres at least 4 possible lines that needs to be followed up on. again i'm not trying to be an anushole but trying to point out the missed opportunity.
This is what all erotica aspires to be, but so few reach! Every chapter gets better and better. Oh, to be Brian and to have a sister/lover like Ashley...
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Anonymous04/16/08
damn good
Another great novel Shiggy I loved the detail that you put into this chapter. The Bry's worries were very realistic. One problem I found was that Ashley's friends are a little too willing to help them make this date as romantic as possible. If one of the girls wanted him then maybe she would try to win him over this way but all three of them?
Thanks again and keep up the good work
by
Anonymous04/16/08
Worth the wait
Definatly worth the wait, I look forward to the next installment.
by
Anonymous04/17/08
Brilliant
I waiting so long for this chapter and you didn't disappoint one bit. Amazing Detail, great storyline, characters were spot on which would naturally happen in some events.
by
Anonymous04/19/08
Amazing!~
It's not often that I read erotica that's well written, AND emotionally satisfying. A very good job indeed!
by
Anonymous04/23/08
Great ^_^
Okie, awesome story! Nothing bad can be said about your writing skills, it s simply amazing...i just have one complaint! it was just tooooooooooooooo Loooooonnnnnnggggg! seriously and the build up toooooooooo muchhhh ok so thats two complaint, but barely noticable because of your incredible story telling skills..
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Anonymous05/04/08
`Great Even if You Haven't read previous chapters.
This is one of the few stories that don't need context. Start reading from Chapter 6 and you would feel as if it is a new story.
Keep the good work up.
by
Anonymous05/08/08
Wonderful!
Cannot wait for the next chapter when their secret comes out???Hint!!! Hint!!! You have GOT to FINISH this! PLEASE???
by
Anonymous05/09/08
can you make the chapters shorter
Although it is an amazing story you chapters are so long that it almost makes a person want to give up before making it to the end of the chapter as you wrote it.
by
Anonymous05/17/08
Amazing as usual
I do like how its all in one chapter i just wish your could break it up a bit. other than that FANTASTIC, AMAZING, Two thumbs way way up
by
Anonymous05/23/08
Oh My God!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please keep going with this story It is great about to make my head explode.
by
Anonymous06/05/08
Amazing job.
This is quite possibly the best story I've ever read on Literotica. You continue to top yourself. Shiggy Moto is to porn what Shigeru Miyamoto is to video games. ^_~
I mean it as a sincere compliment when I say you have the makings of a great pornographer. This series could be a very good novel with some monor editing. Congratulations and keep this good stuff coming.
love all of these chapters, never disappointed. This isn't the last one though is it?
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Anonymous06/27/08
Great!
I loved it. You could feel all the emotion and sexual tension in it, which very few stories on this website capture. Continue writing, please.
by
Anonymous07/07/08
Absolutely divine!!!
You're literature has taken over my life! I just want to read your stories all day long! Your stories make me smile all the way through. I wouldn't know what to do with myself if you didnt stop writing these! Not only does the sory supply an ample amount of detailed mind boggling sextual content, but the story line just blows my mind (and other body parts). Please, PLEASE inform your adoring fans of your next work of art!
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Anonymous07/12/08
Good but...
I enjoyed this chapter, but it is missing some of the, I don't know, sweetness of the others. This was loaded with some pretty raunchy sex whereas the other chapters were a love story that happened to have some sex sprinkled in.
This is a very well written story. You pay a lot of attention to plot and character, and it really works. I do agree though, with some of the other commentors to say I hope this isn't the end.
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Anonymous08/24/08
Time's up.
C'mon Shiggy time for another chapter. There is so much more to write about, you can not stop now. Your talent is really quite amazing and obviously your fans feel the same need to keep reading as I do.
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Anonymous08/27/08
Fantastic!!!!
This has to be one of the best, if not the best written story on Literotica. What an amazing emotional rollercoaster ride.
Man All I Got To Say is Ashley can anyone say in.....sa....ti....and everyone raise there hands thats right...able! And Man I Hope You Write Some More and add those Girlfreinds of Hers In There Somehow : D
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Anonymous09/18/08
good but
good but a few goofs that go against human nature like in chapter 4 page 4 when he is cleaning the rug and she tells him to just leave no guy would just go to their room and sulk he would write a note to her "explaining how he felt she no longer needed or wanted his help" put it on his bed then leave the house for the rest of the day if not several days then would avoid her until college started also in chapter 6 when they fought at the park on their date no way would either make up that soon keep it realistic these little goofs really ruin a good story
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Anonymous12/12/08
It had to be good.
A brother and sister in love. Living in the same house with mom and dad. What a smoking hot story to write about. After the first few lines I knew it had to be good. I just finished all 6 and I love your style. Just think your chapters should be smaller, but released more often. Also I just wanna say thanks for the effort and time you gave to us readers.
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Anonymous12/24/08
My 2nd read, still as good
I think this was the first really good story I remember reading here eight months back. I have since read a lot some good many poor a few great from Elianna, Singularity, 800lb gorrilla and Professor Panty and as I rememberred Shiggymoto. I enjoyed this just as much this time as the first. Thanks. -- UK CYNIC.
by
Anonymous12/26/08
Please
Dear God, PLEASE NUMBER 7!!! I love this story so much, in fact this is like my 5th read. I'm begging you to continue.
by
Anonymous01/09/09
Wow Excellent read
Have read a lot of exceptional stories here on literotica and yours was another that I am avidly hoping will be continued soon.
great, really good erotic story thank you for the read and like others I WILL read it again.
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Anonymous01/22/09
Great story
Great stuff, I had a kissing practice with my little sister when we were kids and still (20 yrs later) we have a great bond together. The story gets me to think, what would have happened at that time if we hadn't got a bit scared about our feelings, it was a bit too exciting then.
Would be nice to have a sequel for this, like how did they in practice reached their 10 year plan :)
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Anonymous01/24/09
Brilliant
Im brazilia and my English is poor. Fantastic your work. I think chapter 6 is more than sufficient for the end of this marvelou story. But, you is the storys owner.
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Anonymous03/04/09
The best yet
Just want to let you know how amazing this story was.
not just the sex, but the style of your writing is also first class.
This is one the best written stories I have ever read. The writing style make for enjoyable reading. The story line is marvelous. It is a very romantic, yet throroughly erotic story. I hope that there is more of the story to come.
by
Anonymous06/05/09
DAMN!!!
Words cannot express how amazing this story actually is. It took me almost 3 days to read it all but, I found myself excited everyday to get a little further. I am glad you mentioned bookmarking this last one. I saved the submissions page. Please continue the story. I am very eager to read more. Perfect story!!! I can't say enough good things about it!!!!
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Anonymous06/11/09
Perfect!
You did an awesome job on this story. I look forward to reading more of your works.
Absolutely fantastic story. started reading it yesterday and finished every chapter in just two days. You truly know how to write. This story is really heart-touching. Congratulations! I'll be waiting for your next words. ^__^
by
Anonymous09/02/09
SUPER HOT!
great, amazing, the best, super, astonishing, marvellous, wonderful. well i'm out of words man. hope there's a next chapter soon.
by
Anonymous09/05/09
Impressive
I've been on this site for some time now, and this is by far the best literature I've read. I mean, you could cover this and sell it on bookshelves.
English
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE.....
MAKE MORE ABSOLUTELY 10000000/100
Bookmark??!!! Why?!!
You suggested we bookmark this and I was preparing to do so, then I read your story. Before I knew it two hours had pasted, four orgasms, and a box of kleenex. This relationship and this story have rejuvenated this genre. I have read countless tales of bro and sis with little variation. The attention to detail was beyond the realm of excellent. Like the reviewer before me the rating system is not high enough for this "novel". Please, continue to write on this story line, we wanna know what happens next. While you did have a few grammatical/spelling errors the story was sound in that regard throughout.
Great Story
Wow. Just Wow. Your work never ceases to amaze. Keep them coming. (no pun intended.)
Good work
I've been waiting on this eagerly since October, and I gotta say it surpassed whatever i might have expected, I was however expecting the parents to walk in on them and was abit dissapointed when it didn't turn out that way. Anyways, I sure hope you will continue writing and I'm looking forward to reading it. You might however want to do some proof-reading because there where some gramatical errors and at some places missing words only minor mistakes though and ten thumbs up!
An Update!
Skipped all the way to end to post this: already know it's going to be amazing!
Simply Mindblowing
Wow is all i can say. Ive been waiting for this since ch.5 came out and ive got to say im impressed yet again. You could really be an erotic novel writer~!
I think the awesomeness meter just broke...
...because there's just no way how awesome this chapter was. It was too awesome, that I read this whole chapter in it's entirety in one sitting, in a matter of 7 hours. If at all, I'm glad you ended this chapter with an open ended ending. I really do hope you continue with this series, because I just basically fell in love with these two siblings from the very beginning. Their revelations, in terms of their sibling relationship, struck me very hard in this chapter because I have a younger brother and sister, and an older step-sister, and even then, just the simple relationships of siblings really got me thinking that I should tread carefully in the long run.
Forgetting the genre (incest) at hand for a second, I think this story all comes down to just family, and I thank you for letting me realize how important family really is. I don't know if that was your intent in between the lines of your stories, but I definitely got that hint if you did.
Please, keep making more of these stories of Ashley and Brian, and keep up the good... no... excellent work!! :D
Amazing
You did it again. Wonderful story
It keeps getting Better and Better
Another good JOB!!!. You just keep getting better and better as we go along. Keep up the good work and can't wait to see what comes next.
well done, very creative!
this is well written and it really shows how much thought you put into it shiggy. congratulations. no wonder you took so long in composing it!
good luck with the next chapter.
wow. just wow.
This is probably one of the most thorough and well thought out story lines i've probably have read on here in any genre. most stories on here are generally 2 people fucking, wham,bam, thank you ma'am, end of story. This story however was like looking through a window into the lives of two people.
heres some issues i did have.
*Way too long of a build up to the climax. While i do appreciate a 6 part series, i really felt having 5 entries lead up to the 'sex' was a little much. After the 5th installment it was starting to become a bit tedious.
*some areas was a little over embelished. Especially the sexual encounters. I find it difficult after all the sexual encounters they were having that their parents would not find out. This installment has them getting a bit suspicious, i was hoping that there would have been more to that. LIke one of them finding out and them and the kids having a blow out over it. I also found it difficult for their freinds to be a little too accepting of their relationship. Unless they were going to use it as a power weapon against them. another line that could have been pursued in the series.
*possibility of a pregnancy. The story wasn't clear on if she was on some sort of birth control or not. All we got was 'don't worry i have it taken care of' to paraphrase. A possibility of going with this is having her get pregnant as a result. Maybe she gets intentionally pregnant to keep him from being in a relationship with someone else should things start to go south. it was hinted at in the story that she had a vindictive possesive personality when he wasn't there. It wouldn't be out of character for her to do that. Another story line that could have been pursued. I also wanted to see how this affects the development of their younger sister. Does she reject their behavior or does she embrase it when she comes of age?
I really would like to see a 7th and 8th installment doing deeper in to there relationship and the effects on their freinds and family. Really thats why i wanted to see the sex out of the way around installment 3 or 4 so the 5th and 6th installments could have gone deeper than what it ended at in the 6th installment. in other words story 6 really should have been story 3 of 4. This story is far from over. theres at least 4 possible lines that needs to be followed up on. again i'm not trying to be an anushole but trying to point out the missed opportunity.
WOW!!!
This is what all erotica aspires to be, but so few reach! Every chapter gets better and better. Oh, to be Brian and to have a sister/lover like Ashley...
damn good
Another great novel Shiggy I loved the detail that you put into this chapter. The Bry's worries were very realistic. One problem I found was that Ashley's friends are a little too willing to help them make this date as romantic as possible. If one of the girls wanted him then maybe she would try to win him over this way but all three of them?
Thanks again and keep up the good work
Worth the wait
Definatly worth the wait, I look forward to the next installment.
Brilliant
I waiting so long for this chapter and you didn't disappoint one bit. Amazing Detail, great storyline, characters were spot on which would naturally happen in some events.
Amazing!~
It's not often that I read erotica that's well written, AND emotionally satisfying. A very good job indeed!
Great ^_^
Okie, awesome story! Nothing bad can be said about your writing skills, it s simply amazing...i just have one complaint! it was just tooooooooooooooo Loooooonnnnnnggggg! seriously and the build up toooooooooo muchhhh ok so thats two complaint, but barely noticable because of your incredible story telling skills..
`Great Even if You Haven't read previous chapters.
This is one of the few stories that don't need context. Start reading from Chapter 6 and you would feel as if it is a new story.
Keep the good work up.
Wonderful!
Cannot wait for the next chapter when their secret comes out???Hint!!! Hint!!! You have GOT to FINISH this! PLEASE???
can you make the chapters shorter
Although it is an amazing story you chapters are so long that it almost makes a person want to give up before making it to the end of the chapter as you wrote it.
Amazing as usual
I do like how its all in one chapter i just wish your could break it up a bit. other than that FANTASTIC, AMAZING, Two thumbs way way up
Oh My God!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please keep going with this story It is great about to make my head explode.
Amazing job.
This is quite possibly the best story I've ever read on Literotica. You continue to top yourself. Shiggy Moto is to porn what Shigeru Miyamoto is to video games. ^_~
Commendaable
I mean it as a sincere compliment when I say you have the makings of a great pornographer. This series could be a very good novel with some monor editing. Congratulations and keep this good stuff coming.
awesome, whats next?
love all of these chapters, never disappointed. This isn't the last one though is it?
Great!
I loved it. You could feel all the emotion and sexual tension in it, which very few stories on this website capture. Continue writing, please.
Absolutely divine!!!
You're literature has taken over my life! I just want to read your stories all day long! Your stories make me smile all the way through. I wouldn't know what to do with myself if you didnt stop writing these! Not only does the sory supply an ample amount of detailed mind boggling sextual content, but the story line just blows my mind (and other body parts). Please, PLEASE inform your adoring fans of your next work of art!
Good but...
I enjoyed this chapter, but it is missing some of the, I don't know, sweetness of the others. This was loaded with some pretty raunchy sex whereas the other chapters were a love story that happened to have some sex sprinkled in.
excellent
This is a very well written story. You pay a lot of attention to plot and character, and it really works. I do agree though, with some of the other commentors to say I hope this isn't the end.
Time's up.
C'mon Shiggy time for another chapter. There is so much more to write about, you can not stop now. Your talent is really quite amazing and obviously your fans feel the same need to keep reading as I do.
Fantastic!!!!
This has to be one of the best, if not the best written story on Literotica. What an amazing emotional rollercoaster ride.
Bravo
Man All I Got To Say is Ashley can anyone say in.....sa....ti....and everyone raise there hands thats right...able! And Man I Hope You Write Some More and add those Girlfreinds of Hers In There Somehow : D
good but
good but a few goofs that go against human nature like in chapter 4 page 4 when he is cleaning the rug and she tells him to just leave no guy would just go to their room and sulk he would write a note to her "explaining how he felt she no longer needed or wanted his help" put it on his bed then leave the house for the rest of the day if not several days then would avoid her until college started also in chapter 6 when they fought at the park on their date no way would either make up that soon keep it realistic these little goofs really ruin a good story
It had to be good.
A brother and sister in love. Living in the same house with mom and dad. What a smoking hot story to write about. After the first few lines I knew it had to be good. I just finished all 6 and I love your style. Just think your chapters should be smaller, but released more often. Also I just wanna say thanks for the effort and time you gave to us readers.
My 2nd read, still as good
I think this was the first really good story I remember reading here eight months back. I have since read a lot some good many poor a few great from Elianna, Singularity, 800lb gorrilla and Professor Panty and as I rememberred Shiggymoto. I enjoyed this just as much this time as the first. Thanks. -- UK CYNIC.
Please
Dear God, PLEASE NUMBER 7!!! I love this story so much, in fact this is like my 5th read. I'm begging you to continue.
Wow Excellent read
Have read a lot of exceptional stories here on literotica and yours was another that I am avidly hoping will be continued soon.
ASH
great, really good erotic story thank you for the read and like others I WILL read it again.
Great story
Great stuff, I had a kissing practice with my little sister when we were kids and still (20 yrs later) we have a great bond together. The story gets me to think, what would have happened at that time if we hadn't got a bit scared about our feelings, it was a bit too exciting then.
Would be nice to have a sequel for this, like how did they in practice reached their 10 year plan :)
Brilliant
Im brazilia and my English is poor. Fantastic your work. I think chapter 6 is more than sufficient for the end of this marvelou story. But, you is the storys owner.
The best yet
Just want to let you know how amazing this story was.
not just the sex, but the style of your writing is also first class.
good job, and I cant wait for number 7
Oh hot!
WOW amazing story. You are incredibly talented.
Awesome story
This is one the best written stories I have ever read. The writing style make for enjoyable reading. The story line is marvelous. It is a very romantic, yet throroughly erotic story. I hope that there is more of the story to come.
DAMN!!!
Words cannot express how amazing this story actually is. It took me almost 3 days to read it all but, I found myself excited everyday to get a little further. I am glad you mentioned bookmarking this last one. I saved the submissions page. Please continue the story. I am very eager to read more. Perfect story!!! I can't say enough good things about it!!!!
Perfect!
You did an awesome job on this story. I look forward to reading more of your works.
The BEST!!!!!!!
The BEST story on Literotica!!!!!!!!
No denying the fact...
Wow!
By far THE BEST story I've read on this site! Amazing work!
^__^
Absolutely fantastic story. started reading it yesterday and finished every chapter in just two days. You truly know how to write. This story is really heart-touching. Congratulations! I'll be waiting for your next words. ^__^
SUPER HOT!
great, amazing, the best, super, astonishing, marvellous, wonderful. well i'm out of words man. hope there's a next chapter soon.
Impressive
I've been on this site for some time now, and this is by far the best literature I've read. I mean, you could cover this and sell it on bookshelves.
Very, Very impressive work. A+ Would read again.
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