I loved all of it; Ashley is probably my ideal girl, though we'd probably not get past the oral part. My only complaint [?] is that I waited the last 3 pages for some kind of resolution. Did Brian's father get convinced that he wouldn't leave Ashley for the girl he's dating? Do they come out of the closet to their parents? To her friends? And what about little sister, who's the one that would be left behind and hurt? That's at least one looong chapter, or 2 if they keep going at it like rabbits.[Ir would be funny if the friends caught them somehow.] So there's plenty of material, and plenty of demand, if you're not tired of writing about the Golden Girl.
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Anonymous09/28/09
Superb Work, Better than Shakespeare!
This is the best. Loved it, fantasizing about Ashley every single moment now. Just hope my wife is as good as Ashley.
by
Anonymous10/12/09
Wonderful!
I have to say this is the best story I have read on this site of any genre! I really REALLY hope you continue this story. A+++++++
Words cannot describe how good no wait that was an insult right there, Great no still doesn't do it justice.Out of five id give you a million. And listen to everbody else what happens with nikky ad do they tell everybody they love each, Ashleys friends what about them. Keep on writing. -GKing
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Anonymous06/14/10
This is some of the best writing I have ever read anywhere in my life.
Very impressive! Please keep writing, you are very talented. Please finish this series, this ending is so incomplete...
by
Anonymous07/17/10
This story is amazing.... keep writing more please.. the ending was blahh
by
Anonymous07/21/10
Good story
Near the end you lost me. One minute they were in the car the next they were in bed, I think, naked. The next minute she gets out of the shower before bowling, and this was after they came home from bowling. There were too many times you did this sort of thing in your story. You also got names mixed up, of the girls. Other than that, once I got past it, it was a good story.
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Anonymous08/11/10
goofs
a few major goofs that go against human nature especially where is comes to family and the chapters are way to long make them 3-4 pages tops and you left us hanging what happens next do the parents find out does she get pregnant what about niki and ash's friends you left a lot unsaid and undone time to finish it now SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR STORIES AND RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU START AND THINK BEFORE WRITTING
You have too much talent. You made me fall in love with Ashley too >.
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Anonymous09/06/10
nonstop
someone posted the begining of this in /b/, followed the link here and read the entire thing non-stop, amazing, id have to agree with an early comment on there needing to be some closure at the ending, so many questions left unanswered
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Anonymous09/08/10
Incredible
I have to say, after being referenced here from another site I ended up reading the entirety of the story from beginning to end. It's good to see someone cover the deeper emotional aspects of the characters as well as the rest of the spectrum. Despite being between siblings, the way you penned their love for each other truly made it feel genuine. I would be lying if I said I didn't get attached to the characters, and was sad to see it end. You have a lot of talent, keep up the good work!
I so wish there was at least one finale chapter with the parents and Ashley's friends finding out about their relation ship I hate it was ended up a secret. Other then that though the story was amazing my favorite story so fat couldn't help but fall in love with Ashley. I was sad to see the story end.
by
Anonymous11/03/10
Awesome
Absolutely loved this series, and I would love to see more! Please?
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Anonymous11/06/10
Still amazing!!
This is my second read of this whole series, and still amazes me, and this is the first time in two years since this last chapter you made, that I got into this again. Please, for the sake of your fans, finish and publish the next chapter, because it's been over 2 years!! Please don't let this excellent writing of yours go to waste.
This is such a wonderful story. It was so heart warming. I stayed up all night to read it from the first page to the last...I couldn't stop. I will agree with early comments that it still seems to need an ending to wrap it up and give it that happy ending....even if its not a perfect one.
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Anonymous11/14/10
Fantasic story but
It is a fantasic story except for two things. 1: unbeleiveable and too long on the sex. 2: Didn't end story. Otherwise great story just disaapointed that so many pages and nowhere knowing what happens with them..
by
Anonymous11/17/10
Very well thought out, as well as having good writing. What I liked best was that you took into account the emotions involved, and the time it takes to seduce a relative. That's what sets it aside from most of the incest stories here, which pretty much skip that entire period of confusion and unsure hesitation and go straight to chapter 19. I haven't read your profile yet, but you give me the impression of being feminine. I apologize if you are an offended male, but I have a reason for that impression. First of all, you pay more attention to clothing and how it works than most guys. You also spend more time on describing emotions and thoughts, whereas masculine writers focus more on actions. You see, I meant it as a compliment. In an incest story, the emotions are vital. If you don't get the emotions right, then the story isn't believable, which is very important (at least to me). This story, I could see happening in real life (though if it happened to me, my mother would know immediately. She isn't one to not notice things: she knew I was bi before I did).
My only complaint is that I want MORE!!!!
You should write about what happens later. How their family and friends end up dealing with their relationship. How they break it to them. All I missed was a sense of the story being finished. I think Ash and Bri have much more to share with us.
-.^
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Anonymous11/18/10
Easily the best series on this site!
Do I need to say anymore?
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Anonymous11/25/10
Great Story
WOW...that's it...I'd just like to have know how there mom and dad would have taken the new's about there love..and her friend's too
by
Anonymous11/27/10
best story on the site easily
the only thing im wanting is a since of completion to this amazing story. u delivered on all the other key aspects of the story but u failed to show us what happened in there future that u elaborated on so much. my only request is for another amazing chapter detailing what happens to then in the future and how their family and friends take this news and also if it all works out in the end. i know in real life this could almost never happen but thats the wonder in stories; while they have to sound realistic they are open so many possibilities and endings and thats all im asking u do is put an ending to an otherwise perfect story. thank you
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Anonymous12/24/10
amazing
well i just finished reading the whole series took me less than a day :P how many pages is it in total for a normal book size?
amazing story but although i saw where the family found out in series of points throughout the story for example the mum found out when she was lecturing him and the father when he saw the boutique of flowers etc,,,, but other people seem to completely missed theses points so you could of made it clearer..
i loved it the way you didnt give everything completey like he hadn't even saw her breasts into later in the series thats uncommon and cool,, either way all is good i like it hope to see more
leebrookes@live.com
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Anonymous12/25/10
way to long
NEVER EVER POST A STORY THIS LONG IN ANY CATAGORY EXCEPT THE NOVELS ONE ALL OTHER CATAGORIES SHOULD HAVE STORIES OF THREE PAGES OR SHORTER ARE TRYING TO DRIVE AWAY READERS BECAUSE YOU ARE DOING A GOOD JOB SO FAR
I love this series One of the best on this website if not they best. But I really want to see a last chapter posted its 2 and a half years over due. I want to see the couple come clean about there relationship and everyone's reaction please post the last chapter asap.
by
Anonymous01/08/11
You MUST write professionally
This was written better than some books I've plunked down good money to take home with me from Barnes and Noble.
The depth of detail in descriptions, that the detail never waned and how seamlessly past chapters culminated to developing later chapters was amazing. I found myself not reading this like a short story to get me aroused, but stuck to my computer unable to put it down to find out what happened next, feeling elation during happy moments, crying during the sad events (the bike accident), ever in fear they would get busted and love throughout - WOW!
Like others I too wanted to see the "and they lived happily ever after" final chapter, but after some retrospect, seldom does a good book end this way either - perhaps a "10 years later" (seeing as it was brought up on the date) would feed our intense curiosities while keeping with the level of perfection of this story.
by
Anonymous01/29/11
wanting more
like others would love to see a final chapter, when the parents go on their vacation.
This has to be one of the best stories I have read. Great,
by
Anonymous02/09/11
Is it normal...
...for this story to want to make a 32 year old man, who served in the US Army Infantry, want to cry??? That he never had a love so intense...
I am now and forever in love with Ashely...
by
Anonymous03/03/11
Finish please!
This is such a good story! I hope that you finish it at some point...SOON!!!
by
Anonymous03/05/11
Please continue
I would like to read more of this great story. Will it stay a story of just Brian and Ashley? Will It become one of Brian and Ashley and her friends? Will dark secrets come to life of Mom and Dads past? Will it include his aunts Kim and Justine with his parents? Will Renee be included more in the story? So many possibilities. It is a great read and I hope you will soon write more on it. Thanks for sharing with us.
This is really a great series. I just wanted to say a fee things. Do you use an editor? If not you should, if you do. Well a second one would help. I only noticed a few in the previous chapters but this one had slot
Second. How ever awesome this one was. It was entirely too long next time you should sPlit it into three or four. Or how ever many makes sense.
Please don't take what I've said the wrong way. I love your story and would live to read more. I would also like to help you the same way I would like to be helped
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Anonymous04/12/11
gotta be...
the best story ive read yet on this site, I'm completely emotionally invested in all the characters and would love to see where the story goes from here
It would be a shame to leave this story hanging where it is, since Nikky already knows ease Ashley's friends into the secret and then have the parents find out about it. That is mainly why I read these stories because I like to see how the author handles those situations where people find out whats going on. I also like that you didn't turn this into 'Parents find out -> orgy ensues -> friends find out -> even bigger orgy ensues' like some authors (not going to enclose names =-P) but good work dude, please come back and at least finish this one but I would love to see more of your work.
This story is worth reading. It starts off slow and careful, but picks up with a lot of emotion. Hopefully with the next chapters there will be a happy ending. It would a shame with everything they have been through to have it end any other way.
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Anonymous05/30/11
Awesome
Very awesome! Please continue, (happy end pls) // one of the best stories i read on here mybe even THE best!!!
English
When is Part 7 Coming?
Can't wait!
I want more!
I loved all of it; Ashley is probably my ideal girl, though we'd probably not get past the oral part. My only complaint [?] is that I waited the last 3 pages for some kind of resolution. Did Brian's father get convinced that he wouldn't leave Ashley for the girl he's dating? Do they come out of the closet to their parents? To her friends? And what about little sister, who's the one that would be left behind and hurt? That's at least one looong chapter, or 2 if they keep going at it like rabbits.[Ir would be funny if the friends caught them somehow.] So there's plenty of material, and plenty of demand, if you're not tired of writing about the Golden Girl.
Superb Work, Better than Shakespeare!
This is the best. Loved it, fantasizing about Ashley every single moment now. Just hope my wife is as good as Ashley.
Wonderful!
I have to say this is the best story I have read on this site of any genre! I really REALLY hope you continue this story. A+++++++
Loved it!
I really enjoyed this story. I hope to read more about these characters. Great work!
excellent writer
Your writing skills are fantastic. Please finish this story. I am glad that you are portraying them as a normal couple instead of degenerates.
awesome series!!
this series is awesome!! please finish it?
11 out of 10
The story is one of the best i have ever read. hope u may give completion for the story. its more than 1 year period the 6th chapter came.
Wow
One of the best stories I have read. Please don't leave us hanging and finish the story.
Ashley
Great story,very well written totally agree with the other comments about being completed.
totally awesome story ....... make more! You can't just end it like this!
Ending?
So will this story ever have a proper ending?
AMAZING
Words cannot describe how good no wait that was an insult right there, Great no still doesn't do it justice.Out of five id give you a million. And listen to everbody else what happens with nikky ad do they tell everybody they love each, Ashleys friends what about them. Keep on writing. -GKing
This is some of the best writing I have ever read anywhere in my life.
Great Story
Very impressive! Please keep writing, you are very talented. Please finish this series, this ending is so incomplete...
This story is amazing.... keep writing more please.. the ending was blahh
Good story
Near the end you lost me. One minute they were in the car the next they were in bed, I think, naked. The next minute she gets out of the shower before bowling, and this was after they came home from bowling. There were too many times you did this sort of thing in your story. You also got names mixed up, of the girls. Other than that, once I got past it, it was a good story.
goofs
a few major goofs that go against human nature especially where is comes to family and the chapters are way to long make them 3-4 pages tops and you left us hanging what happens next do the parents find out does she get pregnant what about niki and ash's friends you left a lot unsaid and undone time to finish it now SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR STORIES AND RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND FINISH WHAT YOU START AND THINK BEFORE WRITTING
Oops
You have too much talent. You made me fall in love with Ashley too >.
nonstop
someone posted the begining of this in /b/, followed the link here and read the entire thing non-stop, amazing, id have to agree with an early comment on there needing to be some closure at the ending, so many questions left unanswered
Incredible
I have to say, after being referenced here from another site I ended up reading the entirety of the story from beginning to end. It's good to see someone cover the deeper emotional aspects of the characters as well as the rest of the spectrum. Despite being between siblings, the way you penned their love for each other truly made it feel genuine. I would be lying if I said I didn't get attached to the characters, and was sad to see it end. You have a lot of talent, keep up the good work!
Incredible Story
I so wish there was at least one finale chapter with the parents and Ashley's friends finding out about their relation ship I hate it was ended up a secret. Other then that though the story was amazing my favorite story so fat couldn't help but fall in love with Ashley. I was sad to see the story end.
Awesome
Absolutely loved this series, and I would love to see more! Please?
Still amazing!!
This is my second read of this whole series, and still amazes me, and this is the first time in two years since this last chapter you made, that I got into this again. Please, for the sake of your fans, finish and publish the next chapter, because it's been over 2 years!! Please don't let this excellent writing of yours go to waste.
Beautiful Story
This is such a wonderful story. It was so heart warming. I stayed up all night to read it from the first page to the last...I couldn't stop. I will agree with early comments that it still seems to need an ending to wrap it up and give it that happy ending....even if its not a perfect one.
Fantasic story but
It is a fantasic story except for two things. 1: unbeleiveable and too long on the sex. 2: Didn't end story. Otherwise great story just disaapointed that so many pages and nowhere knowing what happens with them..
Very well thought out, as well as having good writing. What I liked best was that you took into account the emotions involved, and the time it takes to seduce a relative. That's what sets it aside from most of the incest stories here, which pretty much skip that entire period of confusion and unsure hesitation and go straight to chapter 19. I haven't read your profile yet, but you give me the impression of being feminine. I apologize if you are an offended male, but I have a reason for that impression. First of all, you pay more attention to clothing and how it works than most guys. You also spend more time on describing emotions and thoughts, whereas masculine writers focus more on actions. You see, I meant it as a compliment. In an incest story, the emotions are vital. If you don't get the emotions right, then the story isn't believable, which is very important (at least to me). This story, I could see happening in real life (though if it happened to me, my mother would know immediately. She isn't one to not notice things: she knew I was bi before I did).
My only complaint is that I want MORE!!!!
You should write about what happens later. How their family and friends end up dealing with their relationship. How they break it to them. All I missed was a sense of the story being finished. I think Ash and Bri have much more to share with us.
-.^
Easily the best series on this site!
Do I need to say anymore?
Great Story
WOW...that's it...I'd just like to have know how there mom and dad would have taken the new's about there love..and her friend's too
best story on the site easily
the only thing im wanting is a since of completion to this amazing story. u delivered on all the other key aspects of the story but u failed to show us what happened in there future that u elaborated on so much. my only request is for another amazing chapter detailing what happens to then in the future and how their family and friends take this news and also if it all works out in the end. i know in real life this could almost never happen but thats the wonder in stories; while they have to sound realistic they are open so many possibilities and endings and thats all im asking u do is put an ending to an otherwise perfect story. thank you
amazing
well i just finished reading the whole series took me less than a day :P how many pages is it in total for a normal book size?
amazing story but although i saw where the family found out in series of points throughout the story for example the mum found out when she was lecturing him and the father when he saw the boutique of flowers etc,,,, but other people seem to completely missed theses points so you could of made it clearer..
i loved it the way you didnt give everything completey like he hadn't even saw her breasts into later in the series thats uncommon and cool,, either way all is good i like it hope to see more
leebrookes@live.com
way to long
NEVER EVER POST A STORY THIS LONG IN ANY CATAGORY EXCEPT THE NOVELS ONE ALL OTHER CATAGORIES SHOULD HAVE STORIES OF THREE PAGES OR SHORTER ARE TRYING TO DRIVE AWAY READERS BECAUSE YOU ARE DOING A GOOD JOB SO FAR
DBRS
I really want a next chapter
I love this series One of the best on this website if not they best. But I really want to see a last chapter posted its 2 and a half years over due. I want to see the couple come clean about there relationship and everyone's reaction please post the last chapter asap.
You MUST write professionally
This was written better than some books I've plunked down good money to take home with me from Barnes and Noble.
The depth of detail in descriptions, that the detail never waned and how seamlessly past chapters culminated to developing later chapters was amazing. I found myself not reading this like a short story to get me aroused, but stuck to my computer unable to put it down to find out what happened next, feeling elation during happy moments, crying during the sad events (the bike accident), ever in fear they would get busted and love throughout - WOW!
Like others I too wanted to see the "and they lived happily ever after" final chapter, but after some retrospect, seldom does a good book end this way either - perhaps a "10 years later" (seeing as it was brought up on the date) would feed our intense curiosities while keeping with the level of perfection of this story.
wanting more
like others would love to see a final chapter, when the parents go on their vacation.
This has to be one of the best stories I have read. Great,
Is it normal...
...for this story to want to make a 32 year old man, who served in the US Army Infantry, want to cry??? That he never had a love so intense...
I am now and forever in love with Ashely...
Finish please!
This is such a good story! I hope that you finish it at some point...SOON!!!
Please continue
I would like to read more of this great story. Will it stay a story of just Brian and Ashley? Will It become one of Brian and Ashley and her friends? Will dark secrets come to life of Mom and Dads past? Will it include his aunts Kim and Justine with his parents? Will Renee be included more in the story? So many possibilities. It is a great read and I hope you will soon write more on it. Thanks for sharing with us.
Good
This is really a great series. I just wanted to say a fee things. Do you use an editor? If not you should, if you do. Well a second one would help. I only noticed a few in the previous chapters but this one had slot
Second. How ever awesome this one was. It was entirely too long next time you should sPlit it into three or four. Or how ever many makes sense.
Please don't take what I've said the wrong way. I love your story and would live to read more. I would also like to help you the same way I would like to be helped
gotta be...
the best story ive read yet on this site, I'm completely emotionally invested in all the characters and would love to see where the story goes from here
More Please
It would be a shame to leave this story hanging where it is, since Nikky already knows ease Ashley's friends into the secret and then have the parents find out about it. That is mainly why I read these stories because I like to see how the author handles those situations where people find out whats going on. I also like that you didn't turn this into 'Parents find out -> orgy ensues -> friends find out -> even bigger orgy ensues' like some authors (not going to enclose names =-P) but good work dude, please come back and at least finish this one but I would love to see more of your work.
keep going
I agree with the others; don't stop writing this story.
I just finished the last page, and I want more.
Please continue
I agree with the others this series doesnt need to end this way you should keep it going
great story
This story is worth reading. It starts off slow and careful, but picks up with a lot of emotion. Hopefully with the next chapters there will be a happy ending. It would a shame with everything they have been through to have it end any other way.
Awesome
Very awesome! Please continue, (happy end pls) // one of the best stories i read on here mybe even THE best!!!
moreeeeee
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the best chapter yet
this was the best chapter of the story! i so hope you keep the story going!
Aww.. come on is this really the end? Well as much as that is a shame, the story is still really worth reading. Thanks!
Great story needs more cause that ending sucks
What, that's it? Great story! Hopefully, more could be written.
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