Ashley Ch. 06

Sempre Horny

Too verbose. Repetitious. Parents pretty stupid not knowing what's going on....or are they siblings too?

Great

Loved this series, I hope there's more.

Damn I love this series I know it's been awhile but I really hope there's more soon I would love to read this till the end

AMAZING

I love this series. Please you have to make more, this
Is my favorite series on literotica.

Fantastic

This story is certainly the best romantic story between brother and sister. The concept and the theme of dating was amazing. I have no more words to praise this story. Pls dont ruin it by bringing up orgies or other person in their love. Eagerly waiting for the next installment

Love this story!!!

This is absolutely one of the best stories ever!!! It is so romantic and sweet while still being hot and erotic. I love the way you developed your characters too, especially Brian. The difference in his personality and confidence level as his relationship with Ashley progresses was very realistic and you've paced it very well over the course of the story. I can't help but feel that there is still more of Ashley and Brian's story to tell. I really hope you opt to continue writing more soon!!!

Wonderful story

This series is surely the longest sibling romance story submitted on literotica. But somehow, you have managed to keep this story amazingly interesting, lovely and extremely erotic throughout. The romance, the build-up, the trust and the passion of the siblings for each other is truly magnificent. This story is surely among the top 5 incest stories in literotica. And it's surely the best among incest novellas. I give 5 stars and I wish I could rate it higher than that. PLEASE WRITE FURTHER CHAPTERS FOR THIS ONE

Nice and clean

I like this story for it is clean in its way the cam together and that they have a different look as to how the see thing coming out but still want the same future. I am looking forward to the next release.

Absolutely Incredible

I am normally not one who thinks about the incest element one way or another, but I think that it genuinely enhances this series. You describe the tension between their mutual desire and their concerns for the future perfectly, and overall the story is well written and incredibly hot. I really hope that you choose to continue writing in this series; I would love to see what happens down the line. Whether you write any more installments or not, you've done a remarkable job.

Would be nice from the author to give some feedback if hes actually working on another part.

BRAVO

Total agreement with everyone , please add more and continue it as you have till now. Don't just summarize to bring it to a close all too soon. I haven't read in nearly 30 yrs with so much excitement . I read as thou it were a movie script and as I read I set the scean and can visualize every sentence and hear all the different voices.Its taken me two days to read start to finish, taking time out to feed and pass out after the meds.but I did and cant wait to hopefully find out how this story continues. ty so much for bringing the excitement back to me to read.

I read every single chapter and i abolutly loved it. In the next chapters there should be people trying to date them or get in between them but they never faulter and stay together. plus bry should never do anything with any of ashleys friends without her there haha. again i absolutly loved this series and read every chapter

Truly incredible!

I have to say I've never read anything more emotional than your stories. Everything your characters go through I can almost feel what they're feeling. Personally, I've grown quite attached to the characters and I truly hope you're working on more. It would be such a shame to let your writing talents go to waste. Again, phenomenal story! I'll be checking back frequently to see if you ever write more. I am very interested to see where you're imagination can take these characters.

Great Story

I loved this story immensely. The characters are great, the family unit and the dynamics within it are perfect, the characters have a feel of reality about them - real people doing real stuff. The few comments that I offer in the spirit of helping the author- i.e: continuity - the family name is given as Stafford however it's Ashley Roberts who answers the physics question correctly. Was this done intentionally, as a means of concealing her I.D.? Or was it just an Oops? And please watch spelling & typo's? Might I suggest that when editing don't just look to see if everything is there, rather look for that which DOESN'T belong or fit? Maybe a lengthier process but one that's more thorough. And, of course, this tale MUST continue into, through AND beyond college! It can't end here, it's too big of a story! Keep it up & keep it real! Mahalo!

Please write a followup!

This was one of the most amazing things, erotic or otherwise, in my whole entire life! O found myself, as someone else already said, personally attatched to the characters. You made it seem believable, not like its just some story. You have a natural talent for writing, consider going into authorship. Wish there was a followup series, or more parts to this series. Very well done, treat yourself to a glass of champagne.

Please Continue...

The story was awesome... but, it looks like you have so much more to write yet. Please continue this story. As an avid movie watcher, it was actually intriguing to read a movie. Yes, this story has movie qualities. Out of the five I've read here on this site so far... the best.

Simply awesome

The story had so much life in it. Awesome

Brilliant story

This was an excellent story. I really loved the dialog and the true emotion in this story. I agree with some previous comments about the fact that if she was screaming that loud, it should have awakened the parents in the other room, but ignoring a few inconsistencies like this this was excellent. I do hope you continue it and actually start opening up about the relationship to the others (other than their little sister, which Ashley still does not know about). Truly appreciated this.

great series

write more

Great series.

I would love to read more from you. The characters were believable and realistic. I commend the great deal of time you must have put into this.

^__^

What an awesome story, both hot and romantic. The characterization was supperb, together with the dialogues and the imaginatve situations. All in all, one of the best reads in this site. I'm looking forward o read your future projects. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the great work. ^__^

great series

i loved this thank you soooo much for taking the time to write this and plz plz plz write more

Almost there

If you could write in a quick epilogue that details their parents reactions, maybe even a wedding, it would be greatly appreciated. Either way I say 5 stars :)

Very good story. It was well worth the read. Hope you continue to write more in the future.

Closure? great read

Yummy

Awesome story, I loved every minute of it.
But now I need some closure! lol
You should definitely do some kind of epilogue about how they do later on.

LOVE BROTHER SISTER LOVE

I liked your story very much although the constant sex was a bit over the top and I felt short changed with the rather abrupt ending. You could have cut out some of the superfluous sex scenes and put in possibly some group sex with her friends and/or discovery by her parents. The story could have used more sexual tension instead of just one stroke scene after the other I still voted a 5 because your powers of sexual descriptions was phenomenal.

Great story, definitely needs more chapters with a happy ending. Please don't add anybody to share what they have. I think having their family finding out should be enough trama to go thru.

Superb!

Sexy, erotic,exciting and warm, loving, romantic language. Beautiful storyline and
writing BUT sometimes too wordy. It rambles at times, such as when out with all four girls. Needs editing and tightening of content to make this wonderfully written story even better. Eagerly looking for more chapters. Don't stop. Please!

4 years of waiting

And it's finally payed off! I can't believe you're writing the next chapter. Good luck bro, can't wait to read it :)

OK, BUT....

Bry seemed like a doofus for a while, then he was awake and aware. Didn't see where the change happened.
Also, why did Ash let him cum in her after all (!!!) this time? Was she on the pill? Why didn't they make a trip to the drugstore for condoms?
Ch. 7 needs them to be discovered by Nicky or the parents. Wanted to see Bry & Nat hook up as a diversion & create some conflict with Ash.
All I got...ml

Like Ashley herself, this is flawless and alluring

I love the purity and simplicity of their love mirroring the heart you pour into writing. Not every story ever written has to traverse the entire spectrum of emotion and possibilities, and rather than vainly try to convince you to move the story in direction "x" or "y", I'd like to instead encourage you to continue to follow your passion wherever it leads, for I suspect your positive outlook is what brings us all back. Looking forward to the next installment. Thank you!

Excellent.

I see after 5 yrs the author is back. I'd be willing for faster chapters than the 80k 14 page entries, but so long as its good I guess it's worth it.

Cant wait for the next....

So excited for the next chapter. It would be nice for everyone to be happy in the end. Outstanding job. :D

Just finish the story

It's been 6 years from chapter 1 to now. My e-reader battery is getting low!!! Otherwise it's a good story.

When are you ...

When are you going to finish the story. You can't leave it hanging or all us readers waiting. It's been five years and we would like to know what happen after that Saturday night.

Great story so far

Love the story you are a great writer, just keep doing what you are doing to make this story great.

pleeeeease

we want more, please don't leave us hanging

Superb!

I definitely need more of this story. You made me care about the characters. I want to know what the future holds for Ashley and Brian.

Wow!

Intense and Steamy, what a build up to an amazing story!

it does not take nigh on 5 years to write ONE chapter. Update PLEASE :(

Take as Long as Needed.

I understand that it's been 5 years since you've wrote another chapter but maybe he/she is writing another story. A sequel to this one and wants to release it all at once.

Best ever

i hope you write a sequel this is the best story i have read please write another

really good

you have a good story here. i would like to find out what their parents would do if they end up pregnant.

Damn!!

OMG this entire story was so hot. Had to read a part per night - it simply got my little cunny far too excited. I'm not new to incest love stories but this is one of the best and totally believable I've come across (and required sitting on a thick bath towel coz of the wetness you caused me Shiggy ;) Even if it's not a part 7, I am sooo looking forward to whatever you write next. You're an awesome story teller, thank you! And my cunny thanks you too, for 6 amazing and very wet climaxes ;) xoxo Kate.

cute one

in next chapter hope the sex dosent take over the feeling these two having for each other

Well Done!

This is a very well thought out story. I love the fact that you have made the characters believable. I hope you continue the story line. Thank You for sharing it!

update

man please you gotta update. its one hell if an awesome story

Just WoW...! Man.

The best series ever.... Don't stop here, tell us more about theri FUTURE :D...
Shiggy u r awesome.... Can't wait for Ch. 07.
& plzz....
DON'T DISsAPOINT US...... ;) write must..........:.

Amazing !

I read many comments already posted, and I have mixed emotions about them. Too long ? No way. Spelling and grammar errors ? Have seen hundreds way worse. Alter storyline ? No way ! I am an avid reader and former English major. The way you constructed the storyline and wove in the details of these two people's lives was genius. I am really tired of sex for the sake of sex. I enjoyed your weaving of a story into a mini novel. If people don't have the attention span to read 19 pages of a great story, then they have a problem. I only wish I could have rated this story higher than 5 stars. Outstanding work !! Cudos to you for these chapters. I, too, am anxiously awaiting a continuation of the series.