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i want more!
ahhh im so annoyed that you stopped.
i would really like to hear more, its not a predictable story line at all :)
please write again.
Well written
A really good piece of literature ... Looking forward to more chapters ... Leto423
No way to end a story
This was no way to end a story. You left it with no indication it would be continued. This was almost like the
old time saturday morning serials at the movies except you did not say continued. I thought the story was great til it abruptly stopped.
O.K.
So far so good,hope this isn't one of those he is dead already things. Wait on the rest I guess.
I like this.
Please post the next chapter soon. Good start.
Very Good!
This is a very good story you got going. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
i like it
I like it! its a good start to this story! Cant wait to read more!
I like it...
very good story,never stop,send the next chapter soon...
:) Yep
Emotional start and scary too.. hope for the best here :) Cheers Yoron.
Excellent first chapter
Though I would have found it interesting to hear
in more detail what Lisa and George were trying to sell
him...
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