Your right,this is porn not erotica,not my thing.
Not enough emotion here. You also need to proof read it. You have Francine sucking on Francine. And a few other problems with wording.
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Your right,this is porn not erotica,not my thing.
too structured
Not enough emotion here. You also need to proof read it. You have Francine sucking on Francine. And a few other problems with wording.
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