All Comments on 'Freedom'

I love the images and the way the pacing shifts from languid to urgent in keeping with the theme. Always a pleasure to read you, my friend. :-)

Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!

This has quite a punch to it; you know it's coming but still it's like you've been taken by surprise.

It is beautiful. I have one suggestion-- lose the "all" in front of eternity.

best wishes,

oli

really stretching nicely in this one. I notice that your skill with form poetry really gives you grace and an incisive voice when you work in more flexible forms. Nice!