All Comments on 'My Girlfriend's Sister'

Could have been hot, but it's so badly written I had to laugh. Needed an editor in the worst way.

...for a first effort. A quick down and dirty fuck story is all we need sometimes. A bit more polish might be needed but aside from that, not bad. Continue the efforts. For my money, i would say try something longer next time.

Great story! Keep up the great work. That story was hot, not too long and had great details. I loved it and I can't wait to read some of your future material!!

...with the first reader. Although I'll be kinder.

You have a real erotic flair, but you need major editing help. Please have someone edit your stuff in the future before you post.

Good fuck story, got me hard. But spoilt by bad grammar. Do write again but get someone to help you before publishing.

i would love to fuck my girlfriend sister. if she ever cum on to me im going to puound her ass. great story btw!!!

please continue this story and more !!!! awesome !!!

Any chance she wants all her holes filled? I am available

fuck u should have a chapter two

was his gf's sisters pussy fertile? I hope she gets pregnant, stupid bitch

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Great story I hope you carry on ruining that slut!

Sounded like humble brag hahahahha

That was such a HOT story. A great quick read and so exciting.