All Comments on 'Holiday with Mom'

had it not been for the text and spelling. "sum" when you mean "some", for instance. Also, please use "one" and "two" instead of 1 and 2, "1" can be confused with "I" and I had to draw back at that which interrupted the flow of the story. Some people will probably think this is just splitting hairs but since you've asked for comments, then that is what I have to say. The sex scenes, however, were exciting and I am sure you can improve on this with a sequel. Give it a try.

Taking your mum on holiday,getting her pissed then shagging her,I really do not want to read such things[but once started I coulnt stop].Not bad at all ,needs a bit of fine tuning.

Ignore comments, keep on writing like this, that was hot and enjoyable. Let's have more. Only criticism, is that there ought to be a chapter two !

I tend to agree with a previous commentator, you could've made this one truly memorable had you done a bit more to flesh out, per se, the numeric data throughout the story (with some exceptions such as pertaining to sizes), and also not using text-speak versions of words.

One other thing struck me as quite a bit off kilter. Her breasts are 36G. Her nipples are only two centimeters in diameter and only stick out one cm when hard? Pick up a ruler to see what 2 cm really looks like, as that isn't even one inch. If that were so, her nipples would be the smallest things ever. Hell, I'm a guy and my nips would be bigger.

Keep writing and let him keep momma happy. Don't worry to much about the critics their just jealous.

This is good make no mistakes about that,its erotic and also fun,the comment from the guy with big nipples whats he doing ,training to be a shemale.

More, more, excellent story. Thank you for a very hot story hon. It would be even hotter if he accidently got her pregnaunt, however unlikely at 45, but not impossible.

Excellent hot hot story. Loved it. Please write a continuation of this doing it from the rear.

The story-lead-in was a bore as were the use of expletives throughout the prose. I was getting into it UNTIL you went from anal back to vaginal *YUCK* -- unless there is a time-out for cleanup and change of condoms that is GROSS

This is an excellent story by a writer whose age is from 18 to 22. Like all his other stories, this one concerns down and dirty motherfucking. Given his youth, it is quite likely that Mr. Fit-4-You is in thrall to the urge every healthy son feels to shove his stiff young prick right up his mother's cunt. The hero in the story has been thinking about the treasure between his mom's legs for a long time. He gets hard when he's around her and isn't shy about letting his mother see what's happening in his pants. When he's face to face for the first time with her cunt he's made dizzy by the rich aroma of his mother's slobbering twat. She cums like never before, and he takes his rightful place between her legs, places his fat dick at the spot he came out of, and rams his big prick home! I love that when the boy has to decide where to unload his balls, he chooses his mother's cunt, marking it as his own from now on. Let's hope the author of this hot tale is writing from first hand, personal experience!

Your story is good. I would have loved to boff my mom. My step dad thought we had, but my luck wasn't good enough.D

i definitely like your story,its suberb reading it only just makes me so horny any and want to wank like a horny rabbit

...if you like impossible and the lack of imagination.

my husband won a holiday for two then broke his leg not to lose the holiday he told me to take our son when we got aboard the ship our cabin was very small in the middle of the ship we try to work out a routine after the first day we gave up and started to be nude in front each other on the forth night we got drunk end up nude in one bunk we just look at each other kiss I felt his hard cock I got unto my back pull him on top and guide his cock into my cunt we spent almost all day fucking its the best two weeks of my life I did not want it to end me and my son are still lovers we have to fuck when my husband is at work

Can't we ever have a nice mom-son story that isn't ruined by anal sex?

36G breasts.

Must look like a freak.

-1 stars, if possible.

My mom was a double e and had real hairy cunt with cunt hair sticking out 2in.i went up to her told her take off your night gown so I can see you naked.once she had it off I walked right up to her grabbed her tits pinched her large nipples real hard and said get on the floor and spread hairy cunt.she did that is when I got on top of her rammed my cock in cunt started fucking her real hard made her scream and saying don't cum in me and I told her to late started cumming in her told her you belong to me now.said from now on your to stay naked and service me and my friends when we stay get your cunt over here.told her expect to start getting pregnant too.

Liked the story for his mom being 43 yrs old i would of made sure she end up getting pregnant and not just once made sure she had 3 kids.

ALSO STOPPED WHEN I GOT TO 36G, SHE MUST HAVE BEEN TOP HEAVY...1-*

Mom big tits hairy cunt my mom same way I am only 20 she 38 and I got her pregant my kid in her now are life is full have 3 kids all boys now she lets my friends fuck her only on weekends full braeback creampie gangbang

another cow story...

She sounds hideous, thank God it's fake

My mom is same size as this woman once she got divorced told her her you now belong to me pushed her on her back ripped her night gown off her rammed my big cock in her she yelled hot her cervix till my cock head got in cervix fucked her unload my sperm into her woom week later told me that my kid was inside her now have two boys now