by atomic6120
...while reading this pathetic excuse for erotica.
Leave writing to WRITERS!
I enjoyed your two submissions. I look at stories that are written here, to be written by amateurs, so I over look a lot of the spelling, grammar, and sentence errors. But what urks me the most are the so called self appointed english lit school teachers, tearing up someones story, and doing it anonymously. Like at a trial the accused has a right to see their accuser. There should not be any allowed anonymous write in(s). Keep them coming.
I enjoyed your story. Try not to get discouraged by the harsh comments. Keep writing and you will get better.
I will chime in with ephiphany and woodbutcher - I like your story telling - you have a gift for interesting description. Let the story unfold as you see fit - no need to be in a frantic hurry. Many stories (including some of my own) suffer from a desire to get right to the raw scenes. I will continue reading because I want to see what happens with your characters - thats a sign of good writing!
Nice, well told, story. The sexual tension between mother and son is nearly tangible at times! It begs, no, demands a second part to tie up loose ends!
Go back to writing childrens stories !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
in short even tho its a children's story u didnt understand it, so u r not smarter than a kid
All mothers and sons should experience such uninhabited love. Reminds me of my mother and myself except we teased for three years before we made love.
I was about to give you 5 stars yet 13 years without an update I just can't. 2 stars instead. Sexual tension will only give you blue balls unless you complete the experience.
I think her saying at the end about seeing him next week hints that she plans on actually fucking him in the shower then.