Sorry, if the wife is going to blatantly cheat like this one does there is no marriage and no love. Why would any man stay if she's goving herself to others and refusing to make love to him?
And Rick and Mira are predators who need to be put down.
Just not my type of story. No eroticism and sick/wimpy characters who I feel a strong antipathy towards.
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Anonymous04/28/08
Was this a satire?
I'm still trying to decide if this was a satire or a serious story. If the former, then maybe I would raise the score to 25% (there were still too many spelling and grammatical errors for me to enjoy the story, and the plot is old). If the latter, I think it is in the wrong category. The husband can deny it all he wants, just like the former Governor of New Jersey denied he was gay, but hubby is certainly a wimp. Beck does not love him. Letting Rick collar him, gag him, and all the rest is ridiculous; if Rick did not want him possibly interfering, he should have just asked to be alone with Rebbecca. Best pal? I'd hate to see how Rick treats his enemies. . .
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Anonymous04/28/08
Should have been under Humor & Satire
But not as good as your usual. A satire of a poor story falls flat.
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Anonymous04/28/08
Poor
Your stories have been going from bad to worse, try clicking on the spell check button once in a while
We need to have a run-off of the biggest wimp/gay author trying to write a LW story. So many wimps so little time. This story sucks and so dose the author. Stick to your day job.
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Anonymous04/28/08
and he's not a wimp?
Yes wimp HIS ass. There should have been heads banging and bones breaking when he pulled out the collar and ball gag. Also she didn't fuck him right after the best friend (and wife) left. You had a good "loving wife" story going on and then you fucked it up.
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Anonymous04/28/08
I'm sure that edgmontgrigor( what?)
feels that he put something over on the reader. edgmont, with his little flsbby pot belly and his too tight leather suit and his way of lisping when he says' call me master ' imagines himself to be Rick and the wimp husband to be all other men...only the master remains...whoooee what bull shit. Hope I never read another of his so called stories...he is a real looser. The real wimp is edgmont, not the husband because it's all in his flabby little drippy dicked mind. marriedwithballs@yahoo.com
Have a nice day! Most of you guys are out of control
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Anonymous04/28/08
I've got an idea
Here's an idea, divorce the selfish bitch, you stupid fuck! Better yet, kill her, kill Rick, kill Mira then kill your pathetic self......if unhappy, why would anyone stay in this situation? MORONIC at best.
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Anonymous04/28/08
Drivel
This has to be one of the most pathetic attempts at writing that I've had the great misfortune to read, the whole storyline is completely foolish. If the husband is unhappy then why is he still in the relationship? I doubt any judge in the world would deny him a divorce under the circumstances he is enduring and he would get a very nice settlement as an added bonus. What exactly is the point you were trying to make posting this piece of garbage? and finally DON'T QUIT YOUR DAY JOB! You definitely need to get a grip on reality, even in fiction you need to keep the story feeling real. Maybe you should try your hand at some other type story as very few authors can pull off a story like this as it takes a great deal of time and effort to make a story like this worthy of posting even though far to many make a pitiful effort. Try reading some of DG Hear, S-Des or Agena's stories to get an idea how these stories can be written and made interesting.
You should have taken your time with this story. You jumped ahead way too much. There was no real description of the sex and afterwards you simply had an epilogue of sorts describing your current situation. I realize it's so tempting to rush through a story so you can get it on Literotica but it's just so much more satisfying when you totally complete a story first.
ot the time spent reading this story. I do not like to read about wimps and feel that somehow I expected down to the end
that this guy would show his competence and come out on top... I really think that I will not even take another chance on a story by this author.
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Anonymous06/12/08
Husband Loves His Wife And Gets Screwed
I wish that you left the husband breaking off the affair between his wife and Rick or just leaving. I find lots of these type stories, but fewer ones where the husband asserts himself and keeps the wife from taking advantage of him.
Not what I expected from the beginning of the story. Don't worry, I will not read or vote on any more of your stuff.
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Anonymous08/28/09
How can anyone take this seriously?
Even if this were a serious fantasy I can't see anyone getting entertainment out of the story. I could continue, with crude remarks, but it's not worth the effort.
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Anonymous09/17/09
Sorry wrong category
This belongs in either Humor or Erotic Horror depending on whether it was meant seriously or as a bitch slap joke.
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Anonymous09/17/09
Da Gator thinks he got something all rest didnt
he did the pile of manure smacked him right in the face. He's about the only one that didnt get it.
Oops made the mistake of reading another E. Grigor story.
Just another LW author who starts the characters out in one direction and then degenerates the story into a stereotypical and poor cuckold story.
My bad.
The main character has no consistency. Why would he agree to allow another man to have sex with his wife completely out of the blue? Why would his wife ask? Then he is tied up and gagged. An extra person joins in and he is basically humiliated. Why does he just accept this? He says he is not a wimp. He never mentions he wants to be treated like this. He says he is unhappy with the situation. Yet, he does nothing about it. He doesn't pound the shit out of his "friend". Nothing about the story or the main characters reaction to it makes sense. He talks one way and acts in a different way. The purpose of a story is to build characters and have them act in a believable manner. You might as well have had him quack like a duck. That would have made just as much sense.
English
super dumbass
why on earth did he stay with her one night after this revelation? he should at least leave her if not cut his friends balls off first. super wimp
This was a funny assed story.
Thanks for the good laugh. Time to put a little humor into the LW catagory.
At least...
you weren't a wimp!!
Not worth comment
We would be talking about 2 dead people.
Sucks
Not worth the effort. Sorry
This story needs to end with 3 dead bodies
Sorry, if the wife is going to blatantly cheat like this one does there is no marriage and no love. Why would any man stay if she's goving herself to others and refusing to make love to him?
And Rick and Mira are predators who need to be put down.
Just not my type of story. No eroticism and sick/wimpy characters who I feel a strong antipathy towards.
Was this a satire?
I'm still trying to decide if this was a satire or a serious story. If the former, then maybe I would raise the score to 25% (there were still too many spelling and grammatical errors for me to enjoy the story, and the plot is old). If the latter, I think it is in the wrong category. The husband can deny it all he wants, just like the former Governor of New Jersey denied he was gay, but hubby is certainly a wimp. Beck does not love him. Letting Rick collar him, gag him, and all the rest is ridiculous; if Rick did not want him possibly interfering, he should have just asked to be alone with Rebbecca. Best pal? I'd hate to see how Rick treats his enemies. . .
Should have been under Humor & Satire
But not as good as your usual. A satire of a poor story falls flat.
Poor
Your stories have been going from bad to worse, try clicking on the spell check button once in a while
Wimp
We need to have a run-off of the biggest wimp/gay author trying to write a LW story. So many wimps so little time. This story sucks and so dose the author. Stick to your day job.
and he's not a wimp?
Yes wimp HIS ass. There should have been heads banging and bones breaking when he pulled out the collar and ball gag. Also she didn't fuck him right after the best friend (and wife) left. You had a good "loving wife" story going on and then you fucked it up.
I'm sure that edgmontgrigor( what?)
feels that he put something over on the reader. edgmont, with his little flsbby pot belly and his too tight leather suit and his way of lisping when he says' call me master ' imagines himself to be Rick and the wimp husband to be all other men...only the master remains...whoooee what bull shit. Hope I never read another of his so called stories...he is a real looser. The real wimp is edgmont, not the husband because it's all in his flabby little drippy dicked mind. marriedwithballs@yahoo.com
Oh You Guys are So Funny
Have a nice day! Most of you guys are out of control
I've got an idea
Here's an idea, divorce the selfish bitch, you stupid fuck! Better yet, kill her, kill Rick, kill Mira then kill your pathetic self......if unhappy, why would anyone stay in this situation? MORONIC at best.
Drivel
This has to be one of the most pathetic attempts at writing that I've had the great misfortune to read, the whole storyline is completely foolish. If the husband is unhappy then why is he still in the relationship? I doubt any judge in the world would deny him a divorce under the circumstances he is enduring and he would get a very nice settlement as an added bonus. What exactly is the point you were trying to make posting this piece of garbage? and finally DON'T QUIT YOUR DAY JOB! You definitely need to get a grip on reality, even in fiction you need to keep the story feeling real. Maybe you should try your hand at some other type story as very few authors can pull off a story like this as it takes a great deal of time and effort to make a story like this worthy of posting even though far to many make a pitiful effort. Try reading some of DG Hear, S-Des or Agena's stories to get an idea how these stories can be written and made interesting.
:::Watching the Story Zing over Their Heads:::
Hilarious! The only thing missing was a cream pie. Perhaps Ch. 02?
I think the "writer" wanted to be a satire
but the moron failed -- miserably. This is moronic, badly written, and just a general pile of shit.
Not worth the read
Read the comments first, then move on to a different author.
Attempt @ being a self cuckolding wimp succeeds
You are - therefore you are - what you want !
The purpose escapes me but obviously this is the true you finally.
The closet may now be empty for you - or not.
A failed literary attempt - at a sad biographical confessional story. Are you going away again? Soon
Well now, when and where did they get all the
loco chemicals?
How many ways...
...can one spell STUPID?
Too rushed
You should have taken your time with this story. You jumped ahead way too much. There was no real description of the sex and afterwards you simply had an epilogue of sorts describing your current situation. I realize it's so tempting to rush through a story so you can get it on Literotica but it's just so much more satisfying when you totally complete a story first.
I wuz robbed
ot the time spent reading this story. I do not like to read about wimps and feel that somehow I expected down to the end
that this guy would show his competence and come out on top... I really think that I will not even take another chance on a story by this author.
Husband Loves His Wife And Gets Screwed
I wish that you left the husband breaking off the affair between his wife and Rick or just leaving. I find lots of these type stories, but fewer ones where the husband asserts himself and keeps the wife from taking advantage of him.
WTF
Not what I expected from the beginning of the story. Don't worry, I will not read or vote on any more of your stuff.
How can anyone take this seriously?
Even if this were a serious fantasy I can't see anyone getting entertainment out of the story. I could continue, with crude remarks, but it's not worth the effort.
Sorry wrong category
This belongs in either Humor or Erotic Horror depending on whether it was meant seriously or as a bitch slap joke.
Da Gator thinks he got something all rest didnt
he did the pile of manure smacked him right in the face. He's about the only one that didnt get it.
Oops made the mistake of reading another E. Grigor story.
Just another LW author who starts the characters out in one direction and then degenerates the story into a stereotypical and poor cuckold story.
My bad.
Stupid and inconsistent
The main character has no consistency. Why would he agree to allow another man to have sex with his wife completely out of the blue? Why would his wife ask? Then he is tied up and gagged. An extra person joins in and he is basically humiliated. Why does he just accept this? He says he is not a wimp. He never mentions he wants to be treated like this. He says he is unhappy with the situation. Yet, he does nothing about it. He doesn't pound the shit out of his "friend". Nothing about the story or the main characters reaction to it makes sense. He talks one way and acts in a different way. The purpose of a story is to build characters and have them act in a believable manner. You might as well have had him quack like a duck. That would have made just as much sense.
what!?!?
Once again, unmitigated crap.
Absolute Garbage
And I'm being kind.
"How many ways can one spell STUPID?"
Asks one whining moron, with perhaps the dumbest question in the history of Lit.
Er, let's see now...
Damned Funny
Claude is the author of his adversity. But he is NOT a wimp..........right?
YOU ARE PUTTING NEW SPINS
on the word Whipped. TK U MLJ LV NV
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