Love it! She needs to tell him sooner or later becuase we dont want hium seeing her with fitz at some point! i love that name fitz! lol! Great story! Cant wait for more! Thanks!!!
i am loving this story. Thanks for updating so soon. I wonder how he is going to take it when he finally fins out about Fitz? hope you update soon!
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Anonymous04/28/08
nice work
This story is developing beautifully. I really like the touch of realism of having the son, which she doesn't want to admit in the context of this (maybe) budding relationship. Carry on!
-- KK in Texas
This is wonderful and I can feel her confusion and indecision. She will have to tell him or he will find out and if he finds out he will be furious. Please post again soon.
But I am surprised that he can ignore the elephant in the
parlor. Doesn't he remember that he forced himself on her or
did he have a different vision of what happened.
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Anonymous04/28/08
Okay, but...
This chapter seemed a bit rushed and it showed in the lack of editing. Perhaps another proofread would be in order for the next chapter as well as getting more in depth about how each character feels about their first meeting. It can't be left unsaid, regardless if she tells him about the kid or not.
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Anonymous04/29/08
One suggestion
I am enjoyed your story very much. There is one logical gap I hope you soon address: she needs to ask herself and him, "Why do you want to start a 'relationship' with me? Is it guilt from four years ago just surfacing, or something else?"
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Anonymous05/03/08
Where is the next chapter???
This story is sooo addicting! Please post asap!!!
by
Anonymous05/09/08
love it keep going!!
Great story. Would like to see some further development of his feelings and worries and what led him to come back.
I like this. It's nice to see a story about the high school misfit coming off age with out all the usual fairy Godmother crap. Just a young women trying to improve her life for herself as well as her child.
As well a young man coming to terms with an action more than one young man has committed in the heat and confusion of youth. Also nice to see that she did remember the fact he did try to comfort her, badly perphas but still very much like a young arrogant kid that he was.
I really enjoy this story, please keep writing it I would love to see what happens furhter.
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Anonymous05/26/08
a bokenheart
ive read what u have posted but couldnt get chapter 4 to open please try and post it again i dont know why it wouldnt open thank u i loved what i read so far
English
Love it!
Love it! She needs to tell him sooner or later becuase we dont want hium seeing her with fitz at some point! i love that name fitz! lol! Great story! Cant wait for more! Thanks!!!
Great
i am loving this story. Thanks for updating so soon. I wonder how he is going to take it when he finally fins out about Fitz? hope you update soon!
nice work
This story is developing beautifully. I really like the touch of realism of having the son, which she doesn't want to admit in the context of this (maybe) budding relationship. Carry on!
-- KK in Texas
Very Real and So Good!
This is wonderful and I can feel her confusion and indecision. She will have to tell him or he will find out and if he finds out he will be furious. Please post again soon.
Delightful story!
But I am surprised that he can ignore the elephant in the
parlor. Doesn't he remember that he forced himself on her or
did he have a different vision of what happened.
Okay, but...
This chapter seemed a bit rushed and it showed in the lack of editing. Perhaps another proofread would be in order for the next chapter as well as getting more in depth about how each character feels about their first meeting. It can't be left unsaid, regardless if she tells him about the kid or not.
One suggestion
I am enjoyed your story very much. There is one logical gap I hope you soon address: she needs to ask herself and him, "Why do you want to start a 'relationship' with me? Is it guilt from four years ago just surfacing, or something else?"
Where is the next chapter???
This story is sooo addicting! Please post asap!!!
love it keep going!!
Great story. Would like to see some further development of his feelings and worries and what led him to come back.
how incredibly sweet
I like this. It's nice to see a story about the high school misfit coming off age with out all the usual fairy Godmother crap. Just a young women trying to improve her life for herself as well as her child.
As well a young man coming to terms with an action more than one young man has committed in the heat and confusion of youth. Also nice to see that she did remember the fact he did try to comfort her, badly perphas but still very much like a young arrogant kid that he was.
Please write some more
I really enjoy this story, please keep writing it I would love to see what happens furhter.
a bokenheart
ive read what u have posted but couldnt get chapter 4 to open please try and post it again i dont know why it wouldnt open thank u i loved what i read so far
Loving it so far...
I really like you heroine. I hope she gets her heart's desire.
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