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Ellen's Business Trip

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Once a cheating slut wife, always a .....

..cheating slut wife.

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Easy!

Walk the fuck away,or throw her out. This is sick fucking behavier and if she is into it you need to run. On your way I would fuck up Carl and the sick slut. Disguesting!

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Good short story

Great story.. keep it up..!!

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by Simple49er05/03/08

It's not clever any more.

Leaving the answer hanging at the end, with the husband trying to decide what the best choice is -AKA, the reader - is a cheap plot twist used all to often by writers who cannot find the ending or in order to please more readers by letting them make the choice they would want. Where it fell apart was when the husband who in his "love" decides, knowing the news she was about to give, decides that her guilt is hurting her so much that in his love he needs to give her his support, puts aside his own feelings at the WRONG moment. He is a loving husband. He cares. He regrets. He needs her love. She then tells a story of her degradation, leaves him to decide what to do, BUT says that she enjoyed it. Implication: she wants to cheat on him with or with out his permission. Just how supportive, loving, caring, and moral is her husband? The author needed to finish and not use this antique, aging plot twist.

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Where's the rest?????

I think you forgot to finish the story!!!!!

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Sir

You forgot the erotica, this is just fucking sick porn!

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by Anonymous05/03/08

I assume when she walked out she kept walking and

left him. It would be the only respectable thing she could have done. She wasnt embarassed at telling her husband she was an unfaithful used slut that had committed adultry with more than one person, she was proud of it. I have swung in threesomes and moresomes with my wife over the years and would not describe myself in any way as sexually repressed. But had my wife, even my swinging wife, came into the house and told me that story her ass would be in the street with only what she had on. Unless she worked and paid for all of her own possessions, and that would require her making at least a salary equal to mine or more, she would have to negotiate for any of the items to come to her. I know some of you idiots think the woman deserves all or at least half of the possessions no matter what she does, but of course if the husband is the one thats fucks around you think he needs to be stripped of all possessions. Well if you live in such and uncivilized state I would be happy to share the possessions. By the time she got back into the home everything, clothes and all would be cut evenly in half, part to her, part to me. How long would that take not more than over night if you have a good circular saw. Well you gave her half, and if the court wants to make you pay for all of it, let them try that in a state that is mroe civilized and doesnt think sluts that commit adultry need to be financed. Time to join the 20th century folks, yeah I know its the 21st but you dont want the folks in those states to leave the 19th century to fast do you?

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by Anonymous05/03/08

I would havbe her call Vicky or Jackie

and ask her and Carl to visit. Then when they came I would take carl down to a bar I went to and we would meet my friends. I would tell them that Carl was a preditory son of a bitch and out to make other men's wives. They would get real mad at him and then beat him black and blue and and get his face all bloodied up, naturally I would not have a thing to do with this. Then I would take his broken body back home and put him where he could watch then I would fuck Vicky or Jackie all night long while him and my wife watched. My wife would be in tears seeing me give her the fucking of her life. Then I would call some friends, not the ones that beat Crrl up and have them fuck her one after another till her cunt was all bloody and stretched out of shape and then tell them to fuck my wife in the same way. When they would leave my wife would be well fucked out with her cunt all stretched out and Vickey or Jackie would be in pain from getting her cunt and anus all stretched out of shape. The men would also fuck Carl in the ass and make him clean off their shitty cocks with his mouth. Then I would put all my wife's clothes in boxes and tell Car and whoever she was to take her back to Chigago with them. I would have them met in Chicago by more friends who would fuck all three and prostitute them out till they died ffom aids, Then i would marry the sweet little girl from work and live happily everafter. marriedwithballs@yahoo.com

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Same Old Slut Wife Story As All The Rest

This was about as erotic as a bad case of diarrhea. And it isn’t written well either.

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by fregen05/03/08

I think

I think she is saying she is not going to stop. Indeed, she appears rather proud of her behavior. So why is she upset?

He seemed the decent sort. He didn't start throwing things, including her, out on the street. He actually was quite kind. So why did she treat him this way? Lots of unanswered questions.

Thanks for sharing.

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by Anonymous05/03/08

This story

Really sucked. What exactly was the point? this really seems to be the type story one would expect from a seriously messed up woman, not a man.

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by Orion62305/03/08

Nicely Done

The husband has a real find in a wife who is a shoe-in for Slut of the Year. The story isn't very believable but it's quite entertaining.

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by Harryin VA05/03/08

wife at beginning doesnt match wife at the end

At the begining she sobbing & remorseful... at the end end... the wife's last statement was HATEFUL & confrontational. WHY?

Her last statment is essentially saying "super wimp David I had the Best sex of my life when I was NOT drunk and it had NOTHING to do with you and I loved it so much I will do it again...

Part 2..... SCRATCH ONE MARRIAGE

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by iakatz05/03/08

Please continue!!!

I want to know the rest of the story!

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by JADED_ONE196905/03/08

please tell us

In chapter two if there is one please tell us that the husband took all his wifes cloths and put them in a taxi, then put his wife in the taxi then called her friend and said make room for one more person because she isn't welcome here! Just one question what has the wife got to gain by telling the husband what she did?

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by Anonymous05/03/08

Don't Bother

With anymore of this story as everyone knows what's coming.
These cuckolding stories are pretty much all the same, very few authors can make a cheating wife story good and you do not appear to be one of them.

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by Ducky705/04/08

Well it was exciting for at least one of them

Ellen really found her inner self.. I sure hope she can help her husband find his inner self with Vickie and her.
She should help him make this a two way street for both of them and then they can travel the road together and explore.

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by Anonymous05/04/08

One of the top ten

This is certainly one of the leading candidates for the top ten list of sickest story of the year.
the Ct. Yankee

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by Anonymous05/04/08

And you felt this warranted your time cuckster

Talent aside this was crap but you valued it enough to spend all that time thinking someone would like it.

Well a few do but the semi-normal 99.9% of us think male humiliation sucks four leggeded whinney come as you do literally - it seems.

A normal person is just angry at his wimpy permissiveness and acceptance of being a cuck. To make it work out somehow - watching? videoing? sucking up Carl for wife's pleasure Sucking Carl's stringing curdled cum from her red swollen cunt?

You may think your special, but ah contraire wimpus de cuckster - wallow some more for us on your belly like a snake into a septic cistern of scum.

Nothing new eh - well then go away or change consequentially or take the negativity you generate comment wise. Perhaps the anger is what you sadly seek.

Self disrespect is among the worst subhuman fetishes with very few jaded numb suckers to egg you on.

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by Anonymous05/04/08

Pregged?

So did you enjoy getting pregnant in your drunk state with Carl's baby as well? Are you going back for more?

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by Slickmeister05/04/08

Only one little criticism....

The folks that generally comment on the cheating wife stories can be pretty critical and cruel. I'm not gonna be that bad. The only thing I'm gonna say is...what was the friend's name? Vickie or Jackie? You kept alternating between the two.

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by Anonymous05/04/08

Chapter 02

Please give us chapter 02, expand the story it has so much potential.

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by Anonymous05/04/08

story was rushed

You didn't give it enough time to develop. More detail on the threesome experience (doggie style, dildo, double penetration, etc...).

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by bruce2205/04/08

Dark Story

The end could have been with a bullet for either or both of them. But if he has no guns in the house he could give each of them a carving knife and probably they would manage a double murder.... Really the story is well written but there is no indication that he deserved any of this and she certainly was not suffering from guilt, so why did she tell him???

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by Anonymous05/04/08

How does this story end?

I think that some of the other comments are interesting but no one knows how this story ends. One ending is the husband accepts what Ellen did and life goes on with him being a cuck. Another ending is he accepts what Ellen did and she convinces him to join in and their life goes on. A third ending is after the husband gets over the shock of what Ellen told him he kicks her ass out or he packs his bags and leaves her. It seems to me that like a growing number of writers that writes half a story it may be because he is lazy, thinks it is cute or does not know how to write the conclusion. I will give him credit in that he did not ask someone else to write a conclusion for him like one writer did last year.

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by Anonymous05/06/08

Well done and to the point

I'm glad you ended the story as you did. The imagery of the formerly shy wife totally enjoying the most depraved things she can imagine was perfect and your timing excellent. You have clearly realized that the point of erotica is to bring bliss to the reader, as opposed to worrying about your characters' future lives. I really enjoyed it, thanks.

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by Anonymous05/06/08

loved it !

hit me like a hammer.... just like the husband....... after cooling down.... i am very curious to all the dirty details...... maybe the husband want to know them too ??...... and then maybe he would like to try them for himselfs ? ....... with or maybe first without his wife !!

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by peggytwitty05/07/08

Very well done short story with a great twist

That was a great ending of Chapter one. Or it was a nice little tease the author thought up. Either way it was well done. I personally hope you may write a chapter two as that would be equally interesting. The only real problem with a chapter two is all sides get to tell you what you did wrong with the eventual outcome. Very nice short story, thank you for the entertainment.PT

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by indyman275205/17/08

humiliation sucks

Chapter 2 would be the determination of quality. Half finished stories don't rate much.
She apparently revels in her ability to humiliate and demean a previously loving spouse.Cold and hateful. completely unworthy of love and caring

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by sexysmile05/31/08

Vickie? Jackie?

Decent idea, but if you don't care about it enough to proofread, why should we care enough to read it?

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by JR6808/11/08

Continuation....

I dont't know why some of the comments are this hard. Yes, you mixed up the names...so what? I hope you won't do it again, but nevertheless the story is just hot, hot, hot!

And I DO hope there will be more parts because there is a whole world to explore for the characters. Please go on!

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by angiquesophie08/11/08

ah...the torment of the poor guy

i loved the last line...the worst thing...
that she had loved all of it. and yes, of course
it makes me wonder what he'd do.

nice story, thanks

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by Anonymous08/15/09

We NEED the Sequel

Great story. But I strongly request the "Aftermath & Divorce" wrap-up. IMO, she's gone, out the door. I want to read about his vindication. That includes the punishments to the other couple and to his wife for trashing his marriage. Did they somehow get electrocuted in their pool, for instance? Obviously he won't be kissing any 'Ass-lickers' on the lips anymore.

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by Anonymous12/18/09

You need a follow up. One in which the wife is

killed or one in which the wife is divorced and the other two are killed. YOu see this man's whole life is destroyed by a slut, his wife, and her friends that stole her from him. The marriage is a farce! Every story needs and ending and this one doesnt have one, it is open ended.

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by deadone11/26/10

What gives?

21 years of nothing sex and then she cuts loose (burns loose?) with other people? Now she only will want kinky group sex? I say dump the bitch and shot her friends. There is no future with her, none. Looks like her true selfish nature has come out.

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by Anonymous03/08/11

Torch

the bitch!

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by Anonymous06/13/12

And?

Is this an attempt to copy JPB's style? Tease the reader with an opening and leave him hanging. Sad and demoralizing.

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by tazz31706/13/12

LISTEN TO THE SHAGGY DOG STORY

and wonder if a bow-wow sequel is en route. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by FD4506/13/12

Well

It's emotionally engaging...if the emotions you want to evoke are pity, disgust, depression, pain and hate.

So well done with that.

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by nakdsub06/13/12

These stories that leave the reader hanging...

Seem to be getting more and more prevalent. Why? I don't know. I was hoping to read a story here. You know...something with a beginning, middle, and...oh yeah, an end! Instead I felt my time was completely and totally wasted, and the author got one star.

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by Oleguy10/13/12

I am surprised!

Amazing how many commentators screeched about your fiction, especially over the possibility of unfaithfullness.
To my mind every person with any trace of a relationship is being slightly adulterous in taking part in the interchange of ideas called Literotica.
'Bout time they recognised this a story telling site.

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by OneShotOne07/07/13

Hated it

Unfinished 1 star stuff.

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by EgoTrixi12/21/13

If you don´t feel the need to continue...

...you should at least prevent starting. Nothing is worse than an uncompleted story.
1 Star

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by bigdnc1309/25/14

*****1*****

Unfinished POS. Lazy writer.

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