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A "Shopping" Day

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous05/03/08

I'm Confused

Author, please accept this polite criticism: Please learn how to use parentheses. I was not able to tell who was talking in your story, nor when. That made it confusing and, with as much dialogue as you inserted, totally unreadable. I only lasted a few paragraphs before I quit the story.

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by Anonymous05/06/08

we need more

i enjoyed the story, but i think U left unfinished, so i will be looking forward to the next chapter. please don't make us wait to long....thanx

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by kinky_meh05/09/08

*shivers*

I love it, keep writing!! :D

Kate *kiss*

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