All Comments on 'The Seduction'

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lordchilworthlordchilworthover 15 years ago
thanks

thanks... succinct without being brief... passionate without being soppy... erotic without being grimy... your writing could develop into something to be really proud of..

A suggestion without criticism... try to start each paragraph with a more eclectic and exiting words, there are a lot of I's at the starts...

please ... more

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
HOT

Wow...that was amazingly hot.

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