All Comments on 'Raven Walks Ch. 02'

I really enjoyed the fist chapter and this one did not disappoint me either. I hope the next one is as good. Keep writing/

Raven Walks Ch 2

So fucking hot,my cunt is dripping and I'm, quivering in my seat . I don't think any stroy I have read on this site has made feel this way !!!!!!!!!

Dee from NJ

I know this story is long so hopefully you corrected the problem with using the incorrect personage. "sucking her deeply inside herself". I would have rated higher if not for this problem making it harder to read smoothly.

Stop being so picky. Constructive criticism is one thing, but not even all authors can detect EVERY tiny mistake. This is one of the most captivating and elegant stories I've encountered. At least the author adheres to the most basic grammatical principles. have you even read some of the other stories on here? Sometimes they're so poorly written it makes me wonder if English is indeed the primary language of the author. Thank god I finally found a story brimming with seduction and dark eroticism whilst not jumping insanely from one tense to another and being written with proper distinction between things like "their," "there," and "they're," as well. I'm loving this tale and am thoroughly enjoying working my way through the chapters like Raven would work his way through women on a crowded dance floor.