story was good...but would have been so much better had you included hubbys.dads...so both sons & dads could have tag-teamed moms/wives together...nothing hotter than total family fun together...and as far as this sex-charged woman is concerned..as well as alot of other women..some hot bi between the sons/dads..with moms directing and participating all together would have sent this story into orbit...
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Anonymous05/11/08
didnt like ending
That was a hand pumping story. Only complaint you dont tell us the ending?????
or maybe sisters or the moms of the other 3 boys? YOu could increase the numbers and even them out a bit in the next chapter.
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Anonymous05/12/08
great
you always have sequels ... roll out more
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Anonymous05/13/08
Not that great
I don't know if it was the 3-ring circus aspect of this or what, but it just did not seem that stimulating. Maybe it was that things developed too fast even with the moms high from their cocktails. I like the incest/taboo stories that leave out the obligatory "oh we shouldn't" segment, but this seemed rushed. Meaning, since you write good stories, maybe try again with this theme.
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Anonymous05/17/08
great story
just imagine if the sons had a couple of black teenage friends and got them involved first and then their fine big butt mothers found out and wanted a piece of the action
With all that sperm spent, one would think that the college these guys went to would be building nurseries?
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Anonymous12/23/08
Hot fantasy
Not realistic, but really hot. It would have been awesome if Audrey would have become pregnant later by her son. Also it would have been much better if Andy and his mom would have just fucked in the kitchen, than after licking her pussy, going to bedroom. I mean, they had just fucked in every way and every place, but then son wants to lead his mom into her bedroom. That was pretty lame from the son.
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Anonymous02/20/09
Any chance of a sequel?
Usually I don't make a comment of "more", letting the writer end the story where s/he wants, but there are elements in this that, for me, are ripe for a sequel or follow-up.
1) How did Bobby talk Audrey into continuing? With Lori & Larry there really isn't much of a story there. It's obvious they had no problems with fucking each other. At the very least I would imagine them going at each other the minute the get into their house, if they wait that long. You could cover them with a brief single page vignette of the two of them. Janice was somewhat reluctant, but Andy wore her down rather easily -- and we've already seen that.
But Audrey was the most reluctant -- vehemently so. There's a story there, a real plot on which you could frame the sex scenes. For example, as a twist on Janice and Andy, despite her stated feelings the weekend wound up awakening feelings/needs she didn't really know she had and it's Audrey who really makes the first move.
2)What about the other three guys? Wouldn't it seem a little odd to their parents that they are spending every single weekend at the house?
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Anonymous03/28/09
Recycled
A lot of this is recycled from "Son Controls His Mother". Lazy work Walt.
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Anonymous07/01/09
Agree...get the boy's girlfrieds involved
All this hot fucking and no girl/girl sex? would have thought it would have been a great orgy where the women cleaned each other up..or the boys cleaning mom's creampie!!
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Anonymous07/09/09
a bit confusing
So many characters to keep track of. Why not distill the plot down to a reasonable amount of characters and sex acts. It comes out hotter and more believable that way. I liked the way it started.
LOL, I LOVED this story. I was so wet from the first time she began making out with the two boys. Do we get to hear about the next party with the new moms joining in or do you think it would be too close to more of the same? Either way, you really seem to write a woman's perspective very well and had me so aroused throughout the tale. Now if you will excuse me i, um...have to take care of something.
English
good...but so much better if...
story was good...but would have been so much better had you included hubbys.dads...so both sons & dads could have tag-teamed moms/wives together...nothing hotter than total family fun together...and as far as this sex-charged woman is concerned..as well as alot of other women..some hot bi between the sons/dads..with moms directing and participating all together would have sent this story into orbit...
didnt like ending
That was a hand pumping story. Only complaint you dont tell us the ending?????
yummy
that was a great dick pumping story, had my cock rock hard, I only wish I was one of those friends
don't these boys have girl friends their own age?
or maybe sisters or the moms of the other 3 boys? YOu could increase the numbers and even them out a bit in the next chapter.
great
you always have sequels ... roll out more
Not that great
I don't know if it was the 3-ring circus aspect of this or what, but it just did not seem that stimulating. Maybe it was that things developed too fast even with the moms high from their cocktails. I like the incest/taboo stories that leave out the obligatory "oh we shouldn't" segment, but this seemed rushed. Meaning, since you write good stories, maybe try again with this theme.
great story
just imagine if the sons had a couple of black teenage friends and got them involved first and then their fine big butt mothers found out and wanted a piece of the action
Nurseries at college?
With all that sperm spent, one would think that the college these guys went to would be building nurseries?
Hot fantasy
Not realistic, but really hot. It would have been awesome if Audrey would have become pregnant later by her son. Also it would have been much better if Andy and his mom would have just fucked in the kitchen, than after licking her pussy, going to bedroom. I mean, they had just fucked in every way and every place, but then son wants to lead his mom into her bedroom. That was pretty lame from the son.
Any chance of a sequel?
Usually I don't make a comment of "more", letting the writer end the story where s/he wants, but there are elements in this that, for me, are ripe for a sequel or follow-up.
1) How did Bobby talk Audrey into continuing? With Lori & Larry there really isn't much of a story there. It's obvious they had no problems with fucking each other. At the very least I would imagine them going at each other the minute the get into their house, if they wait that long. You could cover them with a brief single page vignette of the two of them. Janice was somewhat reluctant, but Andy wore her down rather easily -- and we've already seen that.
But Audrey was the most reluctant -- vehemently so. There's a story there, a real plot on which you could frame the sex scenes. For example, as a twist on Janice and Andy, despite her stated feelings the weekend wound up awakening feelings/needs she didn't really know she had and it's Audrey who really makes the first move.
2)What about the other three guys? Wouldn't it seem a little odd to their parents that they are spending every single weekend at the house?
Recycled
A lot of this is recycled from "Son Controls His Mother". Lazy work Walt.
Agree...get the boy's girlfrieds involved
All this hot fucking and no girl/girl sex? would have thought it would have been a great orgy where the women cleaned each other up..or the boys cleaning mom's creampie!!
a bit confusing
So many characters to keep track of. Why not distill the plot down to a reasonable amount of characters and sex acts. It comes out hotter and more believable that way. I liked the way it started.
omg im so wet
LOL, I LOVED this story. I was so wet from the first time she began making out with the two boys. Do we get to hear about the next party with the new moms joining in or do you think it would be too close to more of the same? Either way, you really seem to write a woman's perspective very well and had me so aroused throughout the tale. Now if you will excuse me i, um...have to take care of something.
magnificent
I keep coming back to this story. So horny, it'll never get old.
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