by Stephen7Redo
Delicious story. Cries out for a sequel. She won't see you as your doctor again, but you can phone her and invite her out to dinner, can't you?
The stories I most enjoy and find most powerful keep it real, have sustained tension, don’t insult the intelligence of the reader, express the physical, mental, and emotional, are true to the five senses, have details but not so many as to bog down or be dogmatic, and have a beginning, middle, and end. Stephen7 you nailed it.
The only disappointment is seeing a reader comment which doesn't offer criticism, only someone being needy trying to put their issue on you.
Not bad, but I thought the guy was going in for a colonoscopy. Whatever happened to that? That story would have been super-hot if it had actually come about, especially had the operation been performed by someone other than his own, regular doctor. That added humiliation of an unfamiliar doctor shoving that tube back and forth, in and out of his ass while trying to maintain the facade that an actual procedure was being performed, while a nurse or two stood by having their fun with our hapless patient would have been a great story. As a general physical exam, your story was ok, but you promised more, and that was why it failed to deliver.