This story was certainly interesting in that it moves along quickly, and ends up in a way different spot than where I thought it was headed. I'd read more ....
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Anonymous05/28/08
Thoughtful
I was really into it. I like being controlled like that and the idea of a man coming to me like that in a coffee shop, I know I would have done the same thing your character did... nothing. I was almost turned off about the urine part at the end, but when i realized how it fit into the story I loved it. Please email me joelisthebomb@yahoo.com if you write another one, or if you just want to chat or whatever. I am really good at editing.
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Anonymous07/21/08
Different
A well written story but for my tastes not as interesting as this authors two previous stories.
English
Please continue
I would like to see more of this story. How and where you are going to take it.
interesting
I like the characters. They each make a solid impression in a very short passage. I am curious to see what comes next.
Different ..
This story was certainly interesting in that it moves along quickly, and ends up in a way different spot than where I thought it was headed. I'd read more ....
Thoughtful
I was really into it. I like being controlled like that and the idea of a man coming to me like that in a coffee shop, I know I would have done the same thing your character did... nothing. I was almost turned off about the urine part at the end, but when i realized how it fit into the story I loved it. Please email me joelisthebomb@yahoo.com if you write another one, or if you just want to chat or whatever. I am really good at editing.
Different
A well written story but for my tastes not as interesting as this authors two previous stories.
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