but I'll comment all the same. Carnevil you are a work in progress. In about twenty years when you grow out of your pimply faced adolescense you might find what it's all about...till then shut the fuck up...Don't write any more stupid dumb ass stories...ok...just shut the fuck up...
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Anonymous05/17/08
Please
Please don't write any more of this childish drivel! please!
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Anonymous05/17/08
Why didnt you put this in the humor section, it
would get better ratings.
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Anonymous05/17/08
Ditto The "Not Worth A Comment" Sentiments
!
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Anonymous05/17/08
!
Why did she get married exactly? Just another slut story where do they come from. And this story has been done to death in fact if you think this is erotic then you need to get laid more often.
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Anonymous05/18/08
Wedding Photographer?
One wonders where the photographer(s) is (are)! Like most stories in this vain, the storyteller has forgotten about us. We show up at most every church wedding to record the happy event and the parents of the bride often pay us a nice bit of money to take pictures and nearly always our agreement with the family places at the reception afterwards. Now really, am I to believe that the photographer (probably a pro) and the likely dozens (if not hundreds) of others with cameras of varies makes missed all this? Like the hour before story where the mother of the bride is missing when the daughter is preparing to wed, this seems unlikely (ok impossible). I think a third story about a couple of weeks later (soon after the honeymoon) might be needed. I would just love to see the bride explain those photos to first her soon to be exhusband and then to her own mother.
Some people just don't get it do they? This is fiction. Anything can happen and it does. It's bloody funny if you have a sense of humour.
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Anonymous05/18/08
Why get married?
I don't understand why she got married if she wants to fuck everyone. Why not just be a professional whore as she is already fucking half the population.
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Anonymous05/18/08
Lovely wife
Hey she needed to be a slut one last time. Wish it could happen to me. Lucky guys.
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Anonymous05/25/08
To the prudes below BITE this!
It's fantasy people (anything goes) but even if she chose to in real life, just enjoy the erotic nature of the story. Your moral opinion is not wanted here.
I didn't realize a ch 2 existed. You had your chance. YOU FUCKED IT UP.
You are the worst fucking author I've ever seem. Hopefully this is your story and Bec is your wife and the both of you should die a slow painful death from aids, cancer. malaria and the plague combined. Fuck you and everybody that looks like you.
DIE
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Anonymous03/13/12
the ultimate betrayal
cucked hard and fast, smoking a cock while getting cornholed, betrayed!
Ever thought about a third chapter about life for Bec and Josh afterwards?
She's still fucking random cocks as well as familiar ones such as her father, Daniel her brother-in-law, her brother Jack, father-in-law and Josh's best friend as the Reverend whose now on the path of adultery along with his son who fucks Beck with him, sometimes on the altar of the church.
When Bec gets pregnant she knows that Josh isn't the father.
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Anonymous03/08/13
Kind of stupid
Really? No one notices her crawling underneath a table? And you didn't even have the creativity to have her miscount legs and suck off her father-in-law/a groomsman/etc?
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Anonymous04/09/13
Hot stuff
I loved it. Totally write more. And i agree with the bellow comment- she totally should suck off her father-in-law!
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Anonymous04/09/13
How does it feel to be truly sick in the head???
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Anonymous08/26/13
What silly nonsense
I realize it's a fictional story, but of all the implausible things to happen. A woman, on perhaps the greatest day of her life, is going to screw up her memories for years to come by being a slut? If you meant for this to be hilarious nonsense - you succeeded.
In this USA state the ex husband does not have to pay children support for the bastards, if the bastards are below 4 years old. Josh accepts Ronald Readen's views and he checks first baby for DNA, because he read Loving Wives and storiesonline.net stories. Josh divorces her after the negative DNA test results and he does not pay child support. Josh does not trust in woman for 3 years, but a woman tells him, her birthday present plan for her future husband to send her future husband to DNA test with the baby and they will have 2-3 DNA test proof common children.
(The Josh's future wife will have 2-3 birthday present for her husband.)
Bec keep runing to gather DNA samples, because if who is the father?
Bec is not lucky, because a foregner was the father of her child so nobody pays her children support.............TOTAL BTB...................
I will write once.
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Anonymous09/03/13
Love this story, If I was a woman I would do the same thing. Many men fuck around why not women. I can taste every drop of cum and feel every cock enter my pussy and ass right now and what a heavenly feeling.
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Anonymous09/03/13
Yikes.
You are a real life retard, how cool is that! Story,-5!
English
Not worth comment
Yikes!
'made me laugh
'Twas fun.
like the other one said not worth comment
but I'll comment all the same. Carnevil you are a work in progress. In about twenty years when you grow out of your pimply faced adolescense you might find what it's all about...till then shut the fuck up...Don't write any more stupid dumb ass stories...ok...just shut the fuck up...
Please
Please don't write any more of this childish drivel! please!
Why didnt you put this in the humor section, it
would get better ratings.
Ditto The "Not Worth A Comment" Sentiments
!
!
Why did she get married exactly? Just another slut story where do they come from. And this story has been done to death in fact if you think this is erotic then you need to get laid more often.
Wedding Photographer?
One wonders where the photographer(s) is (are)! Like most stories in this vain, the storyteller has forgotten about us. We show up at most every church wedding to record the happy event and the parents of the bride often pay us a nice bit of money to take pictures and nearly always our agreement with the family places at the reception afterwards. Now really, am I to believe that the photographer (probably a pro) and the likely dozens (if not hundreds) of others with cameras of varies makes missed all this? Like the hour before story where the mother of the bride is missing when the daughter is preparing to wed, this seems unlikely (ok impossible). I think a third story about a couple of weeks later (soon after the honeymoon) might be needed. I would just love to see the bride explain those photos to first her soon to be exhusband and then to her own mother.
Had to happen
Some people just don't get it do they? This is fiction. Anything can happen and it does. It's bloody funny if you have a sense of humour.
Why get married?
I don't understand why she got married if she wants to fuck everyone. Why not just be a professional whore as she is already fucking half the population.
Lovely wife
Hey she needed to be a slut one last time. Wish it could happen to me. Lucky guys.
To the prudes below BITE this!
It's fantasy people (anything goes) but even if she chose to in real life, just enjoy the erotic nature of the story. Your moral opinion is not wanted here.
hmm.
rather ironic.
'loving' wives.
gotta love it!
These stories crack me up! Maybe it's this corny bride and her hurried desperation, I don't know. Yeah, I do know, that's exactly what it is!
""I'm coming!" cried the Reverend, feeling a delightful combo platter of ecstasy and guilt."
Best line ever. Thank you for filling Literotica with glorious hysterical drivel.
FUCK YOU
I didn't realize a ch 2 existed. You had your chance. YOU FUCKED IT UP.
You are the worst fucking author I've ever seem. Hopefully this is your story and Bec is your wife and the both of you should die a slow painful death from aids, cancer. malaria and the plague combined. Fuck you and everybody that looks like you.
DIE
the ultimate betrayal
cucked hard and fast, smoking a cock while getting cornholed, betrayed!
How about a month/year after the wedding?
Ever thought about a third chapter about life for Bec and Josh afterwards?
She's still fucking random cocks as well as familiar ones such as her father, Daniel her brother-in-law, her brother Jack, father-in-law and Josh's best friend as the Reverend whose now on the path of adultery along with his son who fucks Beck with him, sometimes on the altar of the church.
When Bec gets pregnant she knows that Josh isn't the father.
Kind of stupid
Really? No one notices her crawling underneath a table? And you didn't even have the creativity to have her miscount legs and suck off her father-in-law/a groomsman/etc?
Hot stuff
I loved it. Totally write more. And i agree with the bellow comment- she totally should suck off her father-in-law!
How does it feel to be truly sick in the head???
What silly nonsense
I realize it's a fictional story, but of all the implausible things to happen. A woman, on perhaps the greatest day of her life, is going to screw up her memories for years to come by being a slut? If you meant for this to be hilarious nonsense - you succeeded.
This is the first chapter of a good BTB story
In this USA state the ex husband does not have to pay children support for the bastards, if the bastards are below 4 years old. Josh accepts Ronald Readen's views and he checks first baby for DNA, because he read Loving Wives and storiesonline.net stories. Josh divorces her after the negative DNA test results and he does not pay child support. Josh does not trust in woman for 3 years, but a woman tells him, her birthday present plan for her future husband to send her future husband to DNA test with the baby and they will have 2-3 DNA test proof common children.
(The Josh's future wife will have 2-3 birthday present for her husband.)
Bec keep runing to gather DNA samples, because if who is the father?
Bec is not lucky, because a foregner was the father of her child so nobody pays her children support.............TOTAL BTB...................
I will write once.
Love this story, If I was a woman I would do the same thing. Many men fuck around why not women. I can taste every drop of cum and feel every cock enter my pussy and ass right now and what a heavenly feeling.
Yikes.
You are a real life retard, how cool is that! Story,-5!
JUST AS HILARIOUS AS THE PREQUEL!
Too bad the bride couldn't have worked in a few others too.
I understand the story...
I understand the story, the writer trying to be funny being extreme, but no fun can come from cheating and ignorance...
my very simple question
What would she say if he had fucked a could brides maids that night?
Would she be happy for him, or demand a divorce?
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