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by Capt_Nemo05/25/08

Not bad at all

An unusal theme for a story. It was well thought out. My only negative critisism would be that the flow of the story was too fast. By that I mean if you had been a bit more descriptive and had added some spicy detail you would have a great story. Well done

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by Anonymous05/26/08

EDIT this thing

This could have been a good story. The conversation was stilted and very false. There were some grammatical error that were blaring. GET AN EDITOR.

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