by KEVGOW
Seriously, I wanted to like it, but the dialogue sounds like a 50 yr old fucking a 14yr old girl.
JUST TO FUCK MY NIECE ONE TIME IN HER HOT LITTLE TEENAGE CUNT
AND EAT HER SWEET CUM OH MY MY MY
when a you gonna tell us he knocked her up?
I want to see how she reacts
We need another chapter that shows what happens when she finds she is pregnant from her "fixed" uncle!
50yr fucking a 14yr old niece dialogue I dont think so but if it is then good and great. What more taboo than that!!!! Underage and incest to boot!!!! Yummy. God it was great and keep it up
way to change her name from beth to alison... pay more attention to your writting.... it sucks to read two chapters in a row that really don't seem linked with different names...
cant' wait to see her struggle to take it in the ass..
wow. how repetitive can you be? and not even the same name. i was hoping this would be better than the first chapter, but it was just another let down. hopefully you can do better in the next chapter. i'm skeptical though.
wow i think this made me wet =]]] well wow i cant wait until the next one
Im soakin wet from both of these.... cant wait untill the next!!!!
be careful to your writing how comes the names become different after goin to the next chapter. but i like the story it so interesting im wet and i cant wait another
realy stupid story, with a jackass hero and totaly unbelievable heroine, seriously, bad writing can't be justified by saying it's just a fantasy
You said that your nieces name was Beth in the first one you liar
Keeping the name the same from part 1 to part 2 might be a good idea. Apart from that, I would really like to read furter installments!
really you need to do some editing.. a lot editing.
maybe your story turns some people on, but there are hundreds stories like this on this site. what qualifies a good story is not only an imaginative plot (whether yours is imaginative lies in the eye of the reader, I won't judge), but also the style. Your writing style really sucks. And who talks like that? Have you ever had sex?
Hey. I ain't a hater and all the others out thre can shut up. Her name could be Beth and he calls her allison. IT DOESN'T MATTER. It's an exelnt story, got me hard, and I want number three
This writer is probably the most clueless i have ever encountered, not only he knows nothing about female anatomy apart from some stories he have read, he knows nothing about pills like viagra, dude seriously, viagra does not kick in after a few hours, ROFL
You should probably try to get laid a couple of times before trying to write erotica, or at least do some reserach
WELL YOU CAN GIVE UP WRITING THIS WAS DUMB AND NOT WORTH WHILE READING EVERY TIME I SEE YOUR NAME ''KEVGOW'' I AM GOING TO PASS YOU BY THIS WAS A STUPID RAPE STORY NOT EVEN A STORY JUST A BUNCH OF WORDS YOU FOUND TO PUT DOWN ON PAPER GET SOME GLASSES I GIVE YOU 0 STARS FOR YOUR TIME IN WHICH YOU WASTED IT..................''R''................................
Don't listen to anyone else. Keep writing I liked this story. Ass time baby.
Well, I wouldn't tell that struggling with words 'writing' in reality - this world would feel better if you'd concentrate on reading.
You earned a top ten rating on my personal list of disgust.
I love this story and am looking forward to part 3
This young lady didn't consent to have sex with you but still carried despite cries for you stop. That make you nothing more than a rapist I hope your reading this jail where you belong.
I really like it. Plus it's just a fantasy guys, don't get too emotional about it. Now go read something that's to your preference. We have tags for a reason :P
On a side note, I love the story :)
I'd only like to see a part three if the Girl finds out she's pregnant and bashes the asshole's head in with a baseball bat. Erotic in the sex scenes, but fairly much garbage in the story.
Well its a "STORY" of imagination and fiction....for sure,,,,,,,,,,,,
i started nailing my niece when she turned 20 that's been 14 yrs now....no kids yet,but alot of love making.
My Uncle got me drunk at 13 and fucked me. He still uses me 6 years later and he always forces me to take his cum in my pussy. He waits till I'm sleeping then comes in my room and plays with my pussy until I wake up wet.
Your literary skills are poor in form and execution,
Have you ever read a real book THAT USES ALL CAPS to put forth the idea that a person is yelling? No? Me either. Learn how to narrate.
And try and follow your own bloody story.
The first story the girls name was Beth. Now it's changed to Allison.
The guy lives in his fantasy world, lol. "Now shes a slut for my cock" as she gets on his dick so he can cum in her after he basically told her he was going to rape her ass if she didnt. Rofl.
Sort of interesting story but it could be written better with her character being turned in a smoother fashion.
I already didn't like the first one, but now, I hate it. It's disgusting how he came in her... Bad writing.
I actually kind of liked it. I’m hoping he just blurts out that he lied and came in her “because I just couldn’t help myself”. I’d love to hear her reaction. This story is under the non-consent/reluctance category for a reason people.
I knocked up my niece 4 yrs ago we have a beautiful daughter ,were working on our second
IT must be nice to start out raping Beth and end up with Allison. Personally I would get them both together. What a night that would be, brings back some fond memories.
Not withstanding the name change I did enjoy the story.
first off to all those who feel the need to bash the story and its writer, YOU read the story right? YOU clicked on the "Non-consent/rape" link.
No one really cares if you think its disgusting, its someones imagination on paper and personally stfu and keep scrolling, well written, no. But it's overall sexual feel is great, and most people that have a vast sex life admit they've at some point had what most people call "unhealthy sexual attraction" to a family member. Hell Ive heard of adopted children having a sexual attraction to their birth parents.
end of story..either shut up or do something more useful with your mouth...
is the woman in this story a Retard, - he rapes her & later on she then enjoys it..
BullS... my uncle raped my sister, she sure as hell did not consent or enjoyed it..
the scumbag later tried to rape another niece, plus he forced sex on his daughter & her young child.. The scumbag did get prison for the daughter & gran daughter rape.... the world has some real sick -Sick men in it. - all of them should be killed, prison is not good enough
Looking for chapter 3. What happens next ? Does he keep using her ? What happens when they get home ?? What about the aunt, does she join in ? Does she get pregnant ?
I like the concept and the story and the sex, but the dialogue is really clunky and forced. Nobody talks like that. And the caps are seriously excessive and annoying.
And I'll never understand why people read noncon stories and bitch about them being noncon. Try a different genre then, people.
That girl is too stupid she needs to get the morning after pill so her and her asshole husband don’t throw a monkey wrench into the gene pool , it’s already pretty polluted it seems !!!
Very contradicting statement over there.
He said, "You're going to be a great cocksucker and GUYS love that."
Then his inner voice was, "She was MINE and I was going to take her as much as possible."
Western culture. smh
Where is part 3 ?? It was just getting good. Does she get pregnant ? Does that aunt join in when they get home ??
Fucking her is ok but why make her pregnant.just make a relationship and let them enjoy life as lover but without including pregnancy.
Why this fetish about pregnancy, after being forced?
She lives with mom and dad, if she ends up pregnant, how will she explain to her parents? Uncle didn't know what to do so he fucked me instead, and i liked it?
Stupid!
DNA!
Name change Beth to Allison why? (Same comment as Anonymous 6 months ago). I like Aunt/Uncle --- Nephew/Niece consensual incest fantasies. This story is rape violence. Rewrite this into a uncle/niece consensual erotica type of story.
It's really fucked up. Just if you wanna improve the story: make it more descriptive. Use all the senses. It is a decently written story but there is a lot that the reader has to fill in for themselves.