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Too hurried
Looked like the author was in a hurry to type out the story.
Could have had more narrative.
A Sense of Urgency
Naw, I don't think the story was hurried at all. To me it conveyed that sense of urgency. The urgency of a hot and horney woman, the urgency of a male virgin who's found a woman who is very sexually attractive to him. I felt it was perfectly paced, though the story could have been longer taking us through the aftermath or even a second coupling at a slower pace where both relished the act.
Very beautiful
You write as sexily as you look.
Super hot;-)
Just the way I like an erotic story! More, please!
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