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Love it!
I like it! but i think they should just fall in love already hehe! Great story! Cant wait for more! Thanks!!
Like an addict
please please tell me that your not going to prolong this torture any longer.
You're slipping
Most of this has been very good--I'm still eagerly awaiting new
installments after 15 chapters, after all--but part of this last one reads more like an incompletely developed plot synopsis than a story narrative. You say each couple goes on several dates, but
we get no details or timeline, and you make it sound like Chris is returning from his first and only date with Lisa when he has the accident. Meanwhile James has apparently already moved on.
Not quite there.
Didn't like it as much as the others. Sorry but please keep writing.
Consensus has it
That one was a bit rushed! Also why does Anna tell Chris
that she loves him when he is in a coma and then not follow up on it. You would think that things would have crystallized
in her head.
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