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I likedit
until you got to the slut master part. Then it was just terrible.
It was good.
I thought it was good, i loved the part of them both finding each other,etc...But like the previous person who left a comment, when you got the the 'whore, slut, bitch' thats when it was al ittle let down...I still can't wait for the next chapter, but if I may suggest something...
Drop the whore, slut, and bitch names... she could continue to call him Master, but not the other names. Its just something I thought...Stil I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Very good
Very good story, nice transition into the hard stuff at the end.
Love IT
OH MY GOD THIS WAS SUPPER I LOVE THIS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH
It was very good
I liked it. I know a few people thought it was out there at the end, but anyone who can follow a story would have seen the dark nature you described about him. All in all it was very good, though next time you might add an entry to let people know it's a BDSM story so that they do not unjustly assault you with bad ratings.
What?
I'm big sci fi romance/erotic fan and was very dissapointed when it said sci fi story and turned out it wasn't. I was also expecting the princess to be a little shocked and virginal about his request. So there was no actual details to whats going on except the sex. Other than that story was great but I'd probaly wouldn't read the 2nd chapter.
liked it
Most def not a sci fi. Though I would like you to have introduced charecters more.
What the others said
Drop the whole bitch/slut/whore thing, it ruins the mood. To break a virgin without scaring her away, the introduction to the dark stuff should be more subtle.
He got into name calling too soon, too openly and she submitted so easily, she instantly went from slightly naive to stupid.
The story's got potential. Make the most out of it.
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