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Lovely poem and it's been mentioned on the new poems thread.
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I loved the double meaning found in this poetry, how your words evoke imagery without telling us of the tears or the mourning and subtle hints to the time of year. Gorgeous.
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An amazing piece of writing. No wasted words or wasted spaces between them and you make it look so easy.
Where's the skeptic?
I didn't get this line, 'as ash though bone trees,'not that it matters.
Though I find this poem difficult to criticize, I think I prefer you as the itinerant cynic than a conscious poet, your work is so more exciting and unpredictable and fresh in that guise.
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An odd poem from you, Twelvie.
I'm not sure quite what I make of it. I must say that the opening "In an unsettled wind / from fires that burn deep within" makes me think of someone who ate too much chili for lunch and is having intestinal problems. I would have thought you'd find "fires that burn deep within" cliché, but maybe that's your intent. Perhaps I need a weatherman to know which way the wind blows.
Not what I expected.
A few cliches there. Goodish poem nonetheless.
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This is good though I'm not sure why. My response is visceral rather than intellectual. I ' feel' it rather than understand.
Would never have picked you as the writer ! Interesting variety of responses which is definitely a plus.
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This is good though I'm not sure why. My response is visceral rather than intellectual. I ' feel' it rather than understand.
Would never have picked you as the writer ! Interesting variety of responses which is definitely a plus.
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