by ARIM11B
makes me wonder if the author is a virgin himself.
it sounds like he doesn't know the first thing about sex.
The work of someone who hasn't been laid or is gay or loves degrading women . Save your money and see if you can find a whore who will have you .
It's a shame I can't score any lower. Do you actually know anything about women?
Please do not. Read some more stories and seek an editor.
Please tell me you meant to put this in Humor & Satire. Even then, not good, but at least we would know you knew that. I think you were counting on the fact that your characters were engaged in incest to make the story hot. Sorry, but it didn't work.
NonConsent/Reluctance, it was necessary a rape...but she allowed it occur...which uncanny and stupid. I doubt normally depressed women would do this. Maybe give therapist go with theory of yours would she go with it...if she was emotionally what not would she go all the way in degration of her sex. meaning would she go all way in humiliation of men repeatedly sticking their sex organs in her face so she understand the meaning she is a slut. Humor is not really where I put this. If incest had another category like incest/NonConsent/Reluctance it would be where all those weirdos put something like this.
It's a really gud. But i think that all ladies related to them should be fucked together at same time. But it's also gud. Keep writing.
Like living one of my own fantasies. Loved it so much. Hope there's more .... love grandpa/granddaughter fucks.
Do not let the stupid fucks get you down. I loved both chapters. Gets me so hott.
wow i loved it its my biggest fantasy....thank you and more
lovved it. thank you. and dont listen to them. it was amazing. i am a young girl. 20 and i loved it. please write more. even still i can read this one over and over
The story was great until the rest of the family came in. It was doing amazing being a father/daughter story. I had cum but the end of the bj so the rest of the story had too many names and quickly became typical.
Thought it had too many players to keep track of. Father daughter and throw a brother in would make a good story plus other sister
The story was a bit confusing with all the characters... I had to refer back to figure out who was getting theirs!!
Also, make sure you edit before you post... The viewpoint of the story was very confused as it was not in the same tense. ("As she bended over"... That should read "As she bent over"). There are numerous of these examples in this story.
Otherwise... Nice start..
Totally lame. Third lame pointless story ive read in a row. Cant someone write something good enough to get me hard? Yeesh!
Good concept but a lot to be desired from the execution of it. Don't be afraid to detail her feelings, emotions and what they feel in the moment. This felt really rushed