A Broken Heart Ch. 05

Unbreak her heart soon :D

Somewhat sad but a lovely story. I hope those two find each other soon enough. Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Love it!

Love it! Great story! Please more and soon! Cant wait for the next one! Thanks!!

yeah right

you know why she can't forgive or forget, because he raped her.

Yeah

I love the story but realistically I find no where near close. My exboyfriend "raped" me and eventually I had to break up with him because I couldn’t even accept a hug after that. Sure he apologized, but I’d never forget the feelings I had before, during and after. But I love the story!

great work

Okay! That was unexpected. On the verge of "and they lived happily ever after", we slam into the large stone wall known as "communication problem". And Jake is coming off as a controlling jerk. Don't misunderstand; I am absolutely enjoying the story. I just didn't see that twist coming. I am looking forward to seeing how you resolve the problem.
-- KK in Texas

Very good

I like the way you didnt make everything all 'happily ever after' for this story. The twists and turns of emotions on both sides are great. The only thing I would suggest is for a bit longer installments. It's so good that when the reader starts to get totally sucked in....it ends. Brilliant job!

To Controling

Jake was to controlling over Heidi and she shoul`nt have told him that he was the father of Fitz and there was no real romance in this story it was more like BDSM than romance i have seen more romance in other stories than this story and what about a DNA test to verify that Jake wqas the father why did`nt they sign a prenup if it was out of necessity towards the kid having a father than a loving family?.
Atlanta,Ga
Pat

It is not clear that they know each--

other, except in the biblical sense! They have so little
in common except for Fitz. Strange Story . Well written

It is not clear that they know each--

other, except in the biblical sense! They have so little
in common except for Fitz. Strange Story . Well written

sigh....

I think that's so unfair. he raped her and now he expects her to be okay with her being forced into a marriage? for crying out loud. if he's trying to get any sympathy here he's definitely not getting any from me. jackass. lol (i get slightly into stories)

I love the "wild animal about to bolt" analogy. I wish you could have explained more about why he left (or why he -ish raped her in the first place) and why she never told him about their son.

Your story would've made more sense if she had asked him 'Are you going to rape me' BEFORE she slept with him. If you were going to play the angle of non consent/reluctance seriously, Jake should've jumped through more hoops in order to win her trust, especially after the callous way he treated her, and she would've delayed sleeping with him; has she no self-preservation? Unconvincing romance.