by X-Factor
This was a very nice story. Your writing in general is quite exciting, and this one is no exception.
<br/><br/>If I were to nitpick, I'd say it might be a bit rushed (the writing -- obviously the story is rushed!) and the presence of Eldora is slightly interruptive without being titillating (yet?).
<br/><br/>I loved it! Good work, as always. It's AWESOME to see you back!
He had better come and see her, she will be having his baby this time.
With him seeding her fertile valley, he had better go and see her, to make more siblings for this first baby with his very accomodating seeds and her fertility.
Despite the complainers and the haters x-factor is still one of the best authors on this site wish he would release more
Loved seeing more of the man's desire but he still needs more dialogue while he's having sex with wife's friend. Great job nonetheless