I have been a fan for a number of years. This story is well written and though I am not sure I like the characters they are somewhat compelling. The story actually has me curious which way you will take this and that is very unusual in this genre. I look forward to chaper 4.
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Anonymous06/15/08
Keeping us guessing
Another great story by thecelt. At this point one still does not know how it will turn out, a reconciliation, divorce, or a continuation of where they are at this time.
I look forward to the rest.
What good is a big cock, if you have no balls? Lemme guess, the slut wife will confess all to the big boss & get her boss fired/divorced etc. She'll quit her job and the wimp will take her back. Please don't let it end that way!
wel written and very interesting. I continue to be happy that I do not have to live with either protagonist, but must admit that you are doing a great creative job.
Husband has obviously lost his mind. Unprotected sex with a woman who has been a whore for years. If she had bare back sex with him, she probably did the same with many others. Death wish?
Okay the wife is sorry, the husband has got his rocks off, he's got a huge dick, he thinks(and many on this site think) he is a wimp. But as usual your story writing is good and although I don't personally think anyone could forgive the wife there is potential for at least partial forgiveness but not forgetting I would never forget. This isn't my story but I would have had the wife confess straight after the deed then at least i think the husband could have had time to live with it if nothing else.
looks like layla might have some competition in the loving dept...he may now just become what he thinks she is and fuck every woman he can find....he may also now have enough confidence to actually seduce some other women ....me thinks layla may be missing more tha nshe thought
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Anonymous06/15/08
Sure way to end all marital problems, fuck someone
else, get a disease (or get pregnant), then go back to the spouse now we are even. Do you realize how stupid this is? Getting drunk never solved anything, it just gives you more problems to solve. Getting fucked by a whore, slut, or in the case of women by a user or group fucked doesnt solve anything and in no way makes things even. It is reality only makes the situation worse. You have taken a man of character destroyed his ego, put in back in a loveless sexless home with a whore, then gotten him drunk and let him use a prostitute bareback. I can imagine in your next chapter about the only thing you havent had him do, will be to put a pistol in his hand and let him blow the backside of his head off while the daughter is at the grandparents house. This of course will totally destroy the whore/wifes life and she will commit suicide thinking about what she did to her loving husband. Yep you are writing a great story, not! Tell you what you can give the husband AIDS and not the wife and let her live in sexless marriage caring for her sick husband for years as her punishment.
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Anonymous06/15/08
This is getting better
This story is full of new twists making it impossible to guess what's going to happen next. I'm really looking forward to the next installment to see what new twists a master writer can throw in. I knew this story would be great and so far I've not been disappointed, as I've said before thecelt is one of only a handful that make this category worth reading. Keep up the good work.
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Anonymous06/15/08
Great story
Poor Charlie, now he is confident because some hooker blew smoke up his ass and told him he had a big cock. I can only wonder how big Jake is. I don't know how you come up with all this stuff but I am enjoying it so much.
Increasingly it is becoming obvious that This really is NOT a story but simply an effort to Play SURPRISE with the reader.
The husband who appears to be the so painfaully shy that he should of been mentally committed years ago...who will NT tlak to his wife BUT will instead fuck a hooker bareback. Very consistent and makes sense ...right?
we have the hsuband's Parents teling him... she is way better than you so put up with it...
We have a dumb as shit wife/ unpaid whore who has never heard of sexual harassment laws in chapter 1 but by chapter 3 has all this amazing psychological insight.
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Anonymous06/15/08
a new and exciting twist
This part of Celt's story is quite exciting after the slowness of the previous section of text. I have always enjoyed reading Celt's writing and this story is no exception. I cannot wait to see what Celt now does with Walt's new enthusiasm and discovery. Regarding this story (prior to the present installment) AND Ohio's recent posted story, I have also noted that the more 'classic' very good writers of stories in "Loving Wives" have not posted stories that were as powerful as previously. I agree with 'Harry in VA' on this. I think that maybe one reason for this is the large number of new writers now posting on Literotica. This could be affecting Celt's and Ohio's thoughts. If it were administratively possible, it might be good to have an editorial broad formed overseeing the posting of desirable stories in "Loving Wives." There would be, perhaps as in scientific journals, a group of editors that read and rate stories as acceptable for posting, as acceptable but requiring minor changes, as requiring major revision, and rejected. That way less posting would occur and the effects of the established good authors would not be diluted in the sea of new stories. Just a thought. RAG
Personally I like this chapter far better than Chapter 2.
I may not like Charlie's decision about his marriage, but you at least made me understand "why" he came back. And regardless of how I feel about his decision, if I was his friend and he told me why he did it, I wouldn't be happy he made it, but I would understand and I could support it. THAT was good, and it makes sense. I made him seem more human. He didn't forgive because he was trying to be a saint. But he was trying because loneliness and fear prevented him from considering anything else. And those two qualities were explained as what life was like before his wife, how he couldn't get a date, how he was socially awkward. It makes sense that since he managed to get out of this he wouldn't want to go back. And that he loved his daughter so much, it only compounded his problem with leaving. That it seemed he had no one who depended on him like this before Layla. So far, I like Charlie's further character development.
And the scary part is I personally know someone like this. He was painfully shy, and was socially backwards. But when he got married he changed, he wasn't so bad and it seemed to change him. But after he got divorced he seemed to fall off the face of the planet going back into his shell. I guess the reason I can see Charlie's character is because I've seen someone act similar to this.
Layla's character I still don't like. She calls her Bosses boss, but only "after" she's given in to having sex with the other guy? She makes a comment that Charlie's confession was all based on a lie? So far what was presented in the story was only "partially" a lie. She wasn't with many men, as Charlie thought, but she was with two men that he didn't know about. One because she wanted to relive her first experience with her first lover (and in that case Charlie was right, if he had been everything to her, she never would have even given a second thought to reliving that experience, and it says that the other guy was even more "hung" than Charlie) and with the second guy (Carson Jennings) she could have shut him down early, but she appears was curious and allowed herself to be put in that position. Charlie told her early in the story what was going to happen, but she ignored him.
And I keep falling back to the same question, if sex had been really fantastic with either man, would Layla have kept cheating on Charlie? As the author, and to make the story work, you probably would say no, but in what I read so far, and as selfish as she's been up to this point, I would say yes. If she could keep Charlie from finding out and have both worlds yes she would. She's been only out for herself up to this point, and after getting away the first time with it Charlie never knew till she slipped up a second time. She always counted on Charlie to still be there no matter what she did, or did with other men. And right now she's only trying to save her marriage because she doesn't want to loose Charlie, not because her actions hurt him so badly. It's still the wrong reason to do the right thing. It should have been done without reservation and because she wronged him was willing to do what it took to make it right, not because her actions now have a negative affect and some impact on her. When she cheated the first time, and didn't get caught, he character didn't do anything to make it up to Charlie, or let him know why she was trying to make it up. But now that she's gotten caught, and its now effecting her, she's trying to make it right with Charlie. See wrong reason. Two times she's cheated, but only trying to make it right with Charlie once he found out because of how he now feels negatively about her.
Maybe Chapter 4 will make me like her better, because up till now the only one I like is Walt, and thats not because he got Charlie a hooker, but because he was the only one trying to show Charlie that he had more to offer the world than just being a pin cushion for his wife and his parents
Oh, and why the jab at folks who don't agree with men (or women) who decide to continue a marriage to someone who cheats on them? Few would understand Charlie and most would condemn him as a wimp; a weak, pathetic excuse for a man. They would be very wrong and, in their arrogance, would misread a man stronger than they could imagine. I've said it before and I'll say it again, if a writer wants the reader to understand why someone continues on into a marriage with a cheater, they need to make the reader "believe" it should happen that way, not just "say" it happened this way. That is happens in about 95% of the stories here, the writer just says it happens this way and the reader is supposed to be happy because that makes the story have a happy ending. A story will often spend pages, if not chapters, showing and giving the reader the how and why the other person was hurt by the cheaters actions, building up negative emotions toward the one who hurt them (the cheater) but later spend very little showing the reader "why" the victim should forgive the cheater. Then various writers are "shocked" as to why the reader doesn't want to forgive the cheater. And now a days, if you see forgiveness happen, you want to know it was the right decision for the person(s) involved.
I'm just curious why you often try to sneak a comment like this, extremely thinly disguised, as a dig at readers who don't agree that the marriage should go on. You are extremely talented. YOU have the tools to make a reader dislike or like the character. If the reader doesn't like the cheater who cheated, all you have to do is write in a way to make the reader feel so sorry for the cheater that they feel the victim would wrong them if they didn't take them back. But in a lot of stories by various writers that doesn't happen. So what happens is the reader doesn't see anything in the story to show they are trying to make it right with the "Victim" beyond their self serving attitude of "now that its hurting me I have to find a way to make it right". That's why almost everyone dislikes it when the cheaters get put back with the victims. They've not seen any reason for them to be back together. That's why digs like this bother me. It always seems like an out at the reader instead of making the reader like the characters because of what was written about them.
The writing's not bad but the plot is over the top, as some like to put it. Even an average man like Charlie would not be as stupid as the guy in this story; fucking a whore he does not know, who picked him up in the bar. Some friend Walt turned out to be; getting Charlie drunk and well-fucked makes Walt a therapist, so Charlie now feels better and more confident? The whole problem in the Charlie/Layla circle revolves around their poor communication. Layla was supposed to be the smart one, good at her school work -- surely she has heard of counseling? Even Charlie could not be that dense, could he? But he does not let her speak with him. I really see no advantage to his living in the same house when he avoids contact and communication with his wife. Even their 4 year old child would sense something is not right. Charlie would feel better if he just split and got over it. His parents deserve (figuratively) to be shot. They would seem to be a large part of Charlie's lack of feeling any self-worth -- all they did was put him down when he sought their counsel. I guess there are idiotic people out there who behave this way, but it takes away from one's sympathy and/or empathy for the characters in this story. I do appreciate your effort in writing this story and I'm still interested to see if the characters redeem themselves.
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Anonymous06/15/08
Hmmm
In first chapter the wife was braindead, in second it was the husband, now its the author. Sorry as it was said before, this is not even a bad story this is just trash.
Although I have enjoyed the story so far this chapter was a bit disappointing. First of all the author asks the reader to believe that Charley has 4 beers over a period of two hours and becomes so drunk that he is almost unaware that he is screwing a whore bareback. Secondly, Charley had already confided his sad story to his parents. A man as reticent as he is would be unlikely to tell a friend at work about his personal life. Charley is no longer the character thecelt created in the first two chapters. Four beers and a drunken bout with a whore does not change a man from shy to confident, at least not the Charley we have come to know in chapters 1 & 2.
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Anonymous06/15/08
well
I like reading this story. Not because the plot is excellent no, it just so interesting for me, because I can't follow the thoughts of neither person, the wife or the husband. Its so far away of anything I ever saw or heard, that I just have to read it. It makes no sense at all and is nicely written.
But, wait, who said I have to fuck you? I'm gonna start fucking hookers from now on! Yeah, that's right! Why didn't I think of it before now? Boy, I can be slow sometimes!
But you must know, Layla, I can't live without you, because without you I won't have no friends; my parents say I am just a shy, average man, but that you are not; that you are attractive and will respond to extra marital signals from all kinds of males... And, by god, my parents are so right! But I love you and our daughter too much, so I will sleep in the guest room. Please, jus don't bring your men home to fuck, okay? That's all I ask of you.
No, no, Charlie, I confess my sins and I will never do that again... That is, unless you want me to?, so perhaps you could watch and learn?
No, I am gonna prefer fucking hookers from now on. You can do as your admirers want, okay? 'Cuz you're not an average person like I; you're beautiful, smart, and earns a heck of a lot more money than I do; and now with this promotion, you're earn even more!
My god, my parents are right; you are not an average person like I! 'Tis why I can't live without you, because our friends are OURS, not mine, and if I divorced you, or worse, if you divorce me, I will have no friends. Perhaps even hookers won't fuck me, then!
LOL
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Anonymous06/15/08
Well I changed my mind
I no longer hate the characters as pitiful as they are. I have decided I hate their creator. The Celt is DEAD!
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Anonymous06/15/08
good story line
Too bad he had to commit adultery to get back on path again. He's no better than his wife who committed adultery for financial gain. He did it for self pride. Not much difference to me. Looking forward to the next part which will be very soon.
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Anonymous06/15/08
Well that was a turn into la-la land
And I don't mean that's a good thing. I can see why you didn't want to put this under consequences: they're both morons.
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Anonymous06/15/08
I think people are being too critical
I like the story so far. Its different and it could go anywhere from here. The only thing I dislike is the preaching by the author 'he was the strongest of men - a weaker man would have divorced her but it took a real man to recognize that staying with her was his best course of action'. As I said, its a bit too preachy imo. Its also bs - if the best option he has is being miserable, then he should look into expanding his options. i.e. seeing a shrink to fix his self-confidence problems so he doesnt need to stay with a woman who everyone thinks is too good for him so he has bait to attract friends.
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Anonymous06/16/08
very interesting
i dont agree with all of it, but it sure is nice to again be reading a good story that is interesting. i hope it and the celt keep on keeping on.
I would condemn him as a wimp; a weak, pathetic excuse for a man.
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Anonymous06/16/08
good one
loved it
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Anonymous06/16/08
Thecelt could not have written this/
Thecelt could not have written this. Thecelt is a fine writer and this pile of hog wash is a terrible imitation of a story. She is stupid and promiscuous and he is brain dead and mute. That does not make a fine story. both Layla and Charlie are portayed as idiots, which does not make for an entertaining or erotic story.
60 year old George
This chapter contained 2 disgusting elements. !. Putting onions on fried balonga, and 2. back alley sex with some slezy hooker. Charlies actions were not believable.
Just a couple inconsistencies which if I read the comments I probably would find that others have already commented on. At the beginning you say Christine is six but in this chapter she is four. Also, the reasons you give for Charlie moving back is that he doesn't want to be alone which sounds selfish. That isn't consistent with the character of Charlie you've painted so far. You did mentioned once that he wanted to be with his daughter but for the reason so he wouldn't have to go back to his old life of being alone. The character you've developed seemed to always put others needs before his own but not once did you mention that he was going to stay because he did not want to deprive Christine the benefit of two parents that love her. So, she wouldn't suffer he would swallow his pride and live for her. That would seem to be more consistent with your character. As always though I enjoy your work but I suspect this is more like pleasure to you than it is work.
This is way below the normal author's writing skill! The thought pattern beneath is even worse. Big dick wimp, wow a new one! Get it on with a hooker? Loser is a term that comes to mind. Maybe the wife was right and should have cheated. What a loser! Where is the high ground??
Charlie was thinking about Layla and other MEN. I think that was the author's fault bcs he/she knew about the earlier liaison, but Charlie didn't. I really don't want RAAC, but I'm afraid I'm going to be out-voted.
My, my, my; "I never stopped loving you! "Even tho I disrespected you by sleeping around, sucking all kinds of dicks, letting myself be used like a whore; lying, cheating, scheming, cutting you off sexually, not being there for you, etc., I never stopped loving you!"
Well, whoop-de-doo! I guess that makes everything just fine and dandy! If you had STOPPED loving me and did all those horrible things, I would have been devastated but thank goodness you never stopped loving me! Now come on over here and give me a great big hug and just continue to whore around, as long as you never stop loving me!
English
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Well written...
I have been a fan for a number of years. This story is well written and though I am not sure I like the characters they are somewhat compelling. The story actually has me curious which way you will take this and that is very unusual in this genre. I look forward to chaper 4.
Keeping us guessing
Another great story by thecelt. At this point one still does not know how it will turn out, a reconciliation, divorce, or a continuation of where they are at this time.
I look forward to the rest.
andrewpeters
Still A Wimp
What good is a big cock, if you have no balls? Lemme guess, the slut wife will confess all to the big boss & get her boss fired/divorced etc. She'll quit her job and the wimp will take her back. Please don't let it end that way!
As Always
wel written and very interesting. I continue to be happy that I do not have to live with either protagonist, but must admit that you are doing a great creative job.
Insane Husband
Husband has obviously lost his mind. Unprotected sex with a woman who has been a whore for years. If she had bare back sex with him, she probably did the same with many others. Death wish?
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Okay the wife is sorry, the husband has got his rocks off, he's got a huge dick, he thinks(and many on this site think) he is a wimp. But as usual your story writing is good and although I don't personally think anyone could forgive the wife there is potential for at least partial forgiveness but not forgetting I would never forget. This isn't my story but I would have had the wife confess straight after the deed then at least i think the husband could have had time to live with it if nothing else.
lol great
looks like layla might have some competition in the loving dept...he may now just become what he thinks she is and fuck every woman he can find....he may also now have enough confidence to actually seduce some other women ....me thinks layla may be missing more tha nshe thought
Sure way to end all marital problems, fuck someone
else, get a disease (or get pregnant), then go back to the spouse now we are even. Do you realize how stupid this is? Getting drunk never solved anything, it just gives you more problems to solve. Getting fucked by a whore, slut, or in the case of women by a user or group fucked doesnt solve anything and in no way makes things even. It is reality only makes the situation worse. You have taken a man of character destroyed his ego, put in back in a loveless sexless home with a whore, then gotten him drunk and let him use a prostitute bareback. I can imagine in your next chapter about the only thing you havent had him do, will be to put a pistol in his hand and let him blow the backside of his head off while the daughter is at the grandparents house. This of course will totally destroy the whore/wifes life and she will commit suicide thinking about what she did to her loving husband. Yep you are writing a great story, not! Tell you what you can give the husband AIDS and not the wife and let her live in sexless marriage caring for her sick husband for years as her punishment.
This is getting better
This story is full of new twists making it impossible to guess what's going to happen next. I'm really looking forward to the next installment to see what new twists a master writer can throw in. I knew this story would be great and so far I've not been disappointed, as I've said before thecelt is one of only a handful that make this category worth reading. Keep up the good work.
Great story
Poor Charlie, now he is confident because some hooker blew smoke up his ass and told him he had a big cock. I can only wonder how big Jake is. I don't know how you come up with all this stuff but I am enjoying it so much.
Not a story;Excerise in PLOT twists to fool us!
Increasingly it is becoming obvious that This really is NOT a story but simply an effort to Play SURPRISE with the reader.
The husband who appears to be the so painfaully shy that he should of been mentally committed years ago...who will NT tlak to his wife BUT will instead fuck a hooker bareback. Very consistent and makes sense ...right?
we have the hsuband's Parents teling him... she is way better than you so put up with it...
We have a dumb as shit wife/ unpaid whore who has never heard of sexual harassment laws in chapter 1 but by chapter 3 has all this amazing psychological insight.
a new and exciting twist
This part of Celt's story is quite exciting after the slowness of the previous section of text. I have always enjoyed reading Celt's writing and this story is no exception. I cannot wait to see what Celt now does with Walt's new enthusiasm and discovery. Regarding this story (prior to the present installment) AND Ohio's recent posted story, I have also noted that the more 'classic' very good writers of stories in "Loving Wives" have not posted stories that were as powerful as previously. I agree with 'Harry in VA' on this. I think that maybe one reason for this is the large number of new writers now posting on Literotica. This could be affecting Celt's and Ohio's thoughts. If it were administratively possible, it might be good to have an editorial broad formed overseeing the posting of desirable stories in "Loving Wives." There would be, perhaps as in scientific journals, a group of editors that read and rate stories as acceptable for posting, as acceptable but requiring minor changes, as requiring major revision, and rejected. That way less posting would occur and the effects of the established good authors would not be diluted in the sea of new stories. Just a thought. RAG
Hmm, ok this was waaaay better than before (^_^)
Personally I like this chapter far better than Chapter 2.
I may not like Charlie's decision about his marriage, but you at least made me understand "why" he came back. And regardless of how I feel about his decision, if I was his friend and he told me why he did it, I wouldn't be happy he made it, but I would understand and I could support it. THAT was good, and it makes sense. I made him seem more human. He didn't forgive because he was trying to be a saint. But he was trying because loneliness and fear prevented him from considering anything else. And those two qualities were explained as what life was like before his wife, how he couldn't get a date, how he was socially awkward. It makes sense that since he managed to get out of this he wouldn't want to go back. And that he loved his daughter so much, it only compounded his problem with leaving. That it seemed he had no one who depended on him like this before Layla. So far, I like Charlie's further character development.
And the scary part is I personally know someone like this. He was painfully shy, and was socially backwards. But when he got married he changed, he wasn't so bad and it seemed to change him. But after he got divorced he seemed to fall off the face of the planet going back into his shell. I guess the reason I can see Charlie's character is because I've seen someone act similar to this.
Layla's character I still don't like. She calls her Bosses boss, but only "after" she's given in to having sex with the other guy? She makes a comment that Charlie's confession was all based on a lie? So far what was presented in the story was only "partially" a lie. She wasn't with many men, as Charlie thought, but she was with two men that he didn't know about. One because she wanted to relive her first experience with her first lover (and in that case Charlie was right, if he had been everything to her, she never would have even given a second thought to reliving that experience, and it says that the other guy was even more "hung" than Charlie) and with the second guy (Carson Jennings) she could have shut him down early, but she appears was curious and allowed herself to be put in that position. Charlie told her early in the story what was going to happen, but she ignored him.
And I keep falling back to the same question, if sex had been really fantastic with either man, would Layla have kept cheating on Charlie? As the author, and to make the story work, you probably would say no, but in what I read so far, and as selfish as she's been up to this point, I would say yes. If she could keep Charlie from finding out and have both worlds yes she would. She's been only out for herself up to this point, and after getting away the first time with it Charlie never knew till she slipped up a second time. She always counted on Charlie to still be there no matter what she did, or did with other men. And right now she's only trying to save her marriage because she doesn't want to loose Charlie, not because her actions hurt him so badly. It's still the wrong reason to do the right thing. It should have been done without reservation and because she wronged him was willing to do what it took to make it right, not because her actions now have a negative affect and some impact on her. When she cheated the first time, and didn't get caught, he character didn't do anything to make it up to Charlie, or let him know why she was trying to make it up. But now that she's gotten caught, and its now effecting her, she's trying to make it right with Charlie. See wrong reason. Two times she's cheated, but only trying to make it right with Charlie once he found out because of how he now feels negatively about her.
Maybe Chapter 4 will make me like her better, because up till now the only one I like is Walt, and thats not because he got Charlie a hooker, but because he was the only one trying to show Charlie that he had more to offer the world than just being a pin cushion for his wife and his parents
Oh, and why the jab at folks who don't agree with men (or women) who decide to continue a marriage to someone who cheats on them? Few would understand Charlie and most would condemn him as a wimp; a weak, pathetic excuse for a man. They would be very wrong and, in their arrogance, would misread a man stronger than they could imagine. I've said it before and I'll say it again, if a writer wants the reader to understand why someone continues on into a marriage with a cheater, they need to make the reader "believe" it should happen that way, not just "say" it happened this way. That is happens in about 95% of the stories here, the writer just says it happens this way and the reader is supposed to be happy because that makes the story have a happy ending. A story will often spend pages, if not chapters, showing and giving the reader the how and why the other person was hurt by the cheaters actions, building up negative emotions toward the one who hurt them (the cheater) but later spend very little showing the reader "why" the victim should forgive the cheater. Then various writers are "shocked" as to why the reader doesn't want to forgive the cheater. And now a days, if you see forgiveness happen, you want to know it was the right decision for the person(s) involved.
I'm just curious why you often try to sneak a comment like this, extremely thinly disguised, as a dig at readers who don't agree that the marriage should go on. You are extremely talented. YOU have the tools to make a reader dislike or like the character. If the reader doesn't like the cheater who cheated, all you have to do is write in a way to make the reader feel so sorry for the cheater that they feel the victim would wrong them if they didn't take them back. But in a lot of stories by various writers that doesn't happen. So what happens is the reader doesn't see anything in the story to show they are trying to make it right with the "Victim" beyond their self serving attitude of "now that its hurting me I have to find a way to make it right". That's why almost everyone dislikes it when the cheaters get put back with the victims. They've not seen any reason for them to be back together. That's why digs like this bother me. It always seems like an out at the reader instead of making the reader like the characters because of what was written about them.
-Risq
I guess I'm still disappointed in the plot.
The writing's not bad but the plot is over the top, as some like to put it. Even an average man like Charlie would not be as stupid as the guy in this story; fucking a whore he does not know, who picked him up in the bar. Some friend Walt turned out to be; getting Charlie drunk and well-fucked makes Walt a therapist, so Charlie now feels better and more confident? The whole problem in the Charlie/Layla circle revolves around their poor communication. Layla was supposed to be the smart one, good at her school work -- surely she has heard of counseling? Even Charlie could not be that dense, could he? But he does not let her speak with him. I really see no advantage to his living in the same house when he avoids contact and communication with his wife. Even their 4 year old child would sense something is not right. Charlie would feel better if he just split and got over it. His parents deserve (figuratively) to be shot. They would seem to be a large part of Charlie's lack of feeling any self-worth -- all they did was put him down when he sought their counsel. I guess there are idiotic people out there who behave this way, but it takes away from one's sympathy and/or empathy for the characters in this story. I do appreciate your effort in writing this story and I'm still interested to see if the characters redeem themselves.
Hmmm
In first chapter the wife was braindead, in second it was the husband, now its the author. Sorry as it was said before, this is not even a bad story this is just trash.
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Although I have enjoyed the story so far this chapter was a bit disappointing. First of all the author asks the reader to believe that Charley has 4 beers over a period of two hours and becomes so drunk that he is almost unaware that he is screwing a whore bareback. Secondly, Charley had already confided his sad story to his parents. A man as reticent as he is would be unlikely to tell a friend at work about his personal life. Charley is no longer the character thecelt created in the first two chapters. Four beers and a drunken bout with a whore does not change a man from shy to confident, at least not the Charley we have come to know in chapters 1 & 2.
well
I like reading this story. Not because the plot is excellent no, it just so interesting for me, because I can't follow the thoughts of neither person, the wife or the husband. Its so far away of anything I ever saw or heard, that I just have to read it. It makes no sense at all and is nicely written.
I realized I can't live without you being with me
But, wait, who said I have to fuck you? I'm gonna start fucking hookers from now on! Yeah, that's right! Why didn't I think of it before now? Boy, I can be slow sometimes!
But you must know, Layla, I can't live without you, because without you I won't have no friends; my parents say I am just a shy, average man, but that you are not; that you are attractive and will respond to extra marital signals from all kinds of males... And, by god, my parents are so right! But I love you and our daughter too much, so I will sleep in the guest room. Please, jus don't bring your men home to fuck, okay? That's all I ask of you.
No, no, Charlie, I confess my sins and I will never do that again... That is, unless you want me to?, so perhaps you could watch and learn?
No, I am gonna prefer fucking hookers from now on. You can do as your admirers want, okay? 'Cuz you're not an average person like I; you're beautiful, smart, and earns a heck of a lot more money than I do; and now with this promotion, you're earn even more!
My god, my parents are right; you are not an average person like I! 'Tis why I can't live without you, because our friends are OURS, not mine, and if I divorced you, or worse, if you divorce me, I will have no friends. Perhaps even hookers won't fuck me, then!
LOL
Well I changed my mind
I no longer hate the characters as pitiful as they are. I have decided I hate their creator. The Celt is DEAD!
good story line
Too bad he had to commit adultery to get back on path again. He's no better than his wife who committed adultery for financial gain. He did it for self pride. Not much difference to me. Looking forward to the next part which will be very soon.
Well that was a turn into la-la land
And I don't mean that's a good thing. I can see why you didn't want to put this under consequences: they're both morons.
I think people are being too critical
I like the story so far. Its different and it could go anywhere from here. The only thing I dislike is the preaching by the author 'he was the strongest of men - a weaker man would have divorced her but it took a real man to recognize that staying with her was his best course of action'. As I said, its a bit too preachy imo. Its also bs - if the best option he has is being miserable, then he should look into expanding his options. i.e. seeing a shrink to fix his self-confidence problems so he doesnt need to stay with a woman who everyone thinks is too good for him so he has bait to attract friends.
very interesting
i dont agree with all of it, but it sure is nice to again be reading a good story that is interesting. i hope it and the celt keep on keeping on.
Arrogant? I don't think so.
I would condemn him as a wimp; a weak, pathetic excuse for a man.
good one
loved it
Thecelt could not have written this/
Thecelt could not have written this. Thecelt is a fine writer and this pile of hog wash is a terrible imitation of a story. She is stupid and promiscuous and he is brain dead and mute. That does not make a fine story. both Layla and Charlie are portayed as idiots, which does not make for an entertaining or erotic story.
60 year old George
disgusting
This chapter contained 2 disgusting elements. !. Putting onions on fried balonga, and 2. back alley sex with some slezy hooker. Charlies actions were not believable.
Not Bad So Far
Just a couple inconsistencies which if I read the comments I probably would find that others have already commented on. At the beginning you say Christine is six but in this chapter she is four. Also, the reasons you give for Charlie moving back is that he doesn't want to be alone which sounds selfish. That isn't consistent with the character of Charlie you've painted so far. You did mentioned once that he wanted to be with his daughter but for the reason so he wouldn't have to go back to his old life of being alone. The character you've developed seemed to always put others needs before his own but not once did you mention that he was going to stay because he did not want to deprive Christine the benefit of two parents that love her. So, she wouldn't suffer he would swallow his pride and live for her. That would seem to be more consistent with your character. As always though I enjoy your work but I suspect this is more like pleasure to you than it is work.
"most would condemn him as a wimp; a weak, pathetic excuse for a man. They would be very CORRECT! He's a fuking WIMP!
Entertainment!!!
At it's very best one great story. Thanks for sharing.
chick flick
chick flick, no emotion or characters just controlling women chick flick
Wow ..
This is way below the normal author's writing skill! The thought pattern beneath is even worse. Big dick wimp, wow a new one! Get it on with a hooker? Loser is a term that comes to mind. Maybe the wife was right and should have cheated. What a loser! Where is the high ground??
Change
This chapter changed Charlie into another person. He is now also a cheater. One more chapter...
Loving it
Can't wait to see how it ends. Five stars.
Not Sure
From the chapter descriptions it doesn't look good, but I hope they can fix things.
Unbelievable!
I can tell you from experience, a beautiful wife and good at your job; he already had confidence. A monster dick too...? This is beyond ridiculous!
Confused.
Charlie was thinking about Layla and other MEN. I think that was the author's fault bcs he/she knew about the earlier liaison, but Charlie didn't. I really don't want RAAC, but I'm afraid I'm going to be out-voted.
"I never stopped loving you!"
My, my, my; "I never stopped loving you! "Even tho I disrespected you by sleeping around, sucking all kinds of dicks, letting myself be used like a whore; lying, cheating, scheming, cutting you off sexually, not being there for you, etc., I never stopped loving you!"
Well, whoop-de-doo! I guess that makes everything just fine and dandy! If you had STOPPED loving me and did all those horrible things, I would have been devastated but thank goodness you never stopped loving me! Now come on over here and give me a great big hug and just continue to whore around, as long as you never stop loving me!
???
Was the prostitute being nice?
Layla must have indeed fucked a monster if he was way bigger than her husband if a professional thought he was really large!
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