Why bother asking how good this was-if there was a 150 I would vote 150! I know only a few French words but so what? This was obviously written by someone published;its that good. When you add the sex it becomes what this site was supposed to be-- before "authors" began filling every category with filthy shit that was supposed to "turn you on" by being so crude. Erotica lost its meaning, but theres still some around---like this!
And to think you thought I wouldnt like it!! Loved it, very nicely written, and very erotica rather than mutterings about sex...love it!
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Anonymous08/18/08
Exquisite
Beautiful atmosphere, lovely buildup..absolutely exquisite! The delicacy of the story creates much of the erotic appeal, and all the delicious details take it the rest of the way. Expert handling, masterful storytelling.
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Anonymous09/10/08
Outstanding
This is one of the most sublime stories I have read on this site. What a pleasure to read such carefully detailed writing that creates such an erotic atmosphere. This story has it all: believable characters, an authentic setting and imaginative writing. As another reader commented, it's worth 150/100! Thank you!
and as the temperature of the day rises, so does the heat between the two young lovers, and the pace of the telling increases with it. The story is written from experience, at a guess, since the details are just too authentic to be imaginary. The French dialogue is great, and all of it can be understood from context. Fantastique!
This is perhaps the finest story on this site. Actually, it was an unexpected pleasure to find such expertise of writer's craft here. You handled the story with real finesse. Needless to say, it was an unbelievably arousing read.
A beautifully innocent story. Very well written. You felt the young lovers revel in their exploration of each other. Would love to see a part 2, perhaps after she turns 18. Still in the orchard, near a pond. She may want to wait until marriage, but then, most of us thought that at one time.
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Anonymous05/04/09
A delightful exploration of innocence past...
Brings back fond memories of a sweeter, more gentle time when every touch was new and every sensation took you to a better place... Subtle sensuality
If this is your personal experience then I understand your passionate writing. This is a beautiful story. It shows a different side of you from the other stories I have read. I need to read some more.
This is the first of your stories I decided to read. The use of the gentle countryside, the fresh apples, the warm spring sun, the soft grass, the carefree teenage work, all of is incredibly evocative and suggestive of the sensitive sensuality of the characters. Like another commenter mentioned, it all feels so precious - and I know exactly what you mean when you describe Annie, and how everything about her is intoxicating, makes you love her.
I am so glad I found a writer of your caliber on here.
This is so sweet and seductive, wish my first time was like this. Thank you for a beautifully written story. I loved the French and it authenticated an already stunning piece.
Your ability to superbly echo those wonderful early explorations, without descending to overdone gutter language, is superb. As one Australian to one member of my ancestors tribe, you did it!
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Anonymous09/24/13
Glorious
Just got back from two weeks in France and found this
Lovely
Beautifully done
It's one of my earlier published stories, from over five years ago, and re-reading it, it needs quite a few tweaks to improve it. But I hope it captures something of she scents and sights of L'Isle de France. As well as the trembling uncertainty of a young virgin girl's first sexual experience with another.
English
no contest
Why bother asking how good this was-if there was a 150 I would vote 150! I know only a few French words but so what? This was obviously written by someone published;its that good. When you add the sex it becomes what this site was supposed to be-- before "authors" began filling every category with filthy shit that was supposed to "turn you on" by being so crude. Erotica lost its meaning, but theres still some around---like this!
Age Limit?
Wonderful story, but Seventeen.
To anonymous in usa
The age of consent varies: we do not all live in the USA. In the UK and much of the rest of Europe it is sixteen, and in some places, younger.
Loved it!
And to think you thought I wouldnt like it!! Loved it, very nicely written, and very erotica rather than mutterings about sex...love it!
Exquisite
Beautiful atmosphere, lovely buildup..absolutely exquisite! The delicacy of the story creates much of the erotic appeal, and all the delicious details take it the rest of the way. Expert handling, masterful storytelling.
Outstanding
This is one of the most sublime stories I have read on this site. What a pleasure to read such carefully detailed writing that creates such an erotic atmosphere. This story has it all: believable characters, an authentic setting and imaginative writing. As another reader commented, it's worth 150/100! Thank you!
The heat builds
and as the temperature of the day rises, so does the heat between the two young lovers, and the pace of the telling increases with it. The story is written from experience, at a guess, since the details are just too authentic to be imaginary. The French dialogue is great, and all of it can be understood from context. Fantastique!
Delicately sensual
This is perhaps the finest story on this site. Actually, it was an unexpected pleasure to find such expertise of writer's craft here. You handled the story with real finesse. Needless to say, it was an unbelievably arousing read.
Innocent and beautiful
A beautifully innocent story. Very well written. You felt the young lovers revel in their exploration of each other. Would love to see a part 2, perhaps after she turns 18. Still in the orchard, near a pond. She may want to wait until marriage, but then, most of us thought that at one time.
A delightful exploration of innocence past...
Brings back fond memories of a sweeter, more gentle time when every touch was new and every sensation took you to a better place... Subtle sensuality
Beautifully written
If this is your personal experience then I understand your passionate writing. This is a beautiful story. It shows a different side of you from the other stories I have read. I need to read some more.
Beautiful!
This is the first of your stories I decided to read. The use of the gentle countryside, the fresh apples, the warm spring sun, the soft grass, the carefree teenage work, all of is incredibly evocative and suggestive of the sensitive sensuality of the characters. Like another commenter mentioned, it all feels so precious - and I know exactly what you mean when you describe Annie, and how everything about her is intoxicating, makes you love her.
I am so glad I found a writer of your caliber on here.
So sweet :)
Such a sweet, pleasant memory. Thanks.
Wow
This is so sweet and seductive, wish my first time was like this. Thank you for a beautifully written story. I loved the French and it authenticated an already stunning piece.
Lovely
and gently erotic
Ohh
I loved it. An erotic piece of fine china. Touch it and it breaks.
Almost unbearably beautiful. You can sure write, Scotsman. I must read more.
je vous en pris
Enjoyable, magnifique, merci.
A tois, cherie
Glad you liked it.
Left me gently shaking
Your ability to superbly echo those wonderful early explorations, without descending to overdone gutter language, is superb. As one Australian to one member of my ancestors tribe, you did it!
Glorious
Just got back from two weeks in France and found this
Lovely
Beautifully done
So glad you liked it, 'glorious' anon.
It's one of my earlier published stories, from over five years ago, and re-reading it, it needs quite a few tweaks to improve it. But I hope it captures something of she scents and sights of L'Isle de France. As well as the trembling uncertainty of a young virgin girl's first sexual experience with another.
Many thanks for your kind comment.
Duh!
Careless me! 'She' on the third line of the above should of course be 'the'. Sorry.
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