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Erotica...
Dear Lady, You have truly captured the essence of erotica. Excellent writing skills and a very good flourish of foreplay through the unfolding of the theme. John
Complete Excrement
Not worth reading.
Foil Packet
The use of the foil pack ripping open ruined this story. You were hot but somehow afraid of getting preggie in this fantasy story where there should be no fear of pregnancy or STD.
What a BITCH
Since I a hateful bitch who is also the "heroine" of a story always destroys the story for me, I won't 'vote' where it counts.
Nice whores like that are an assest to men who
are professionals. They can insure a man rises quickly in the ranks and then be recycled for a trophy wive as and upper echelon executive.
a well written story about a sexy woman
I really enjoyed reading your story,and the flow of the post was very good,even if some readers were selfishly critical of the foil packet,I thought it fit with the story very well.Real players don't take chances with unprotected sex,the first time with anyone,at least the ones that are still alive.I hope that you will follow with the next chapter soon.It seems that the little lady has a hot box,that is going to take a lot of seeing to,and I will enjoy reading what you have instore for her.....Rich
!
Not another story where the wife just can't say no! Surely one of these woman will say No! and mean it one day!
a sexy story, well told
I like the way your character responded to the strength of Paul's personality. You managed to portray a submissive nature without it being a caricature. I hope you write more soon!
Gosh - so much for reading your own reviews!
For the people who liked it, I'm glad. The only comment that puzzles me is why someone would read a story in the Naughty Wives category and be surprised that the lady in question had sex with another guy. Is it supposed to be in the Monogomous Wives category? Oh well. I'm going to keep writing safe sex in my stories - sorry if that bothers people. (Oh hell - I can't post a comment w/o rating it? That hardly seems fair!)
Apparently you don't read all the stories in this
section. You would discover some of them don't have wives that experiment or whatever. Not all stories in this section have wives that cheat or betray or have fun with permission of husbands (who never seem to have fun with other women somehow). Isn't it funny that way? It was an okay story, but why didn't you end it with telling the husband and having sex with him? Too mundane and ordinary, I guess.
Good Story
Well written. I hope you will write more soon.
re: Gosh - so much for reading your own reviews!
1) The category is called Loving Wives, not Naughty.
2) As sherlock40 stated, the category fits several types of stories. The only way your stance makes any sense is if you are admitting that the stories on this category are all alike, that we can know what is in them without reading them first, that this story was nothing but the same cliches that have been done to death and that no originality or thought went into its creation.
Sorry!
But haveing a slut for a wife is death in the corporate world. She just grounded her husbands career, thats the real world. Writing o.k. but she is selfish and a slut, and should be treated that way. Not a wife anyone would really want.
Why?
I agree with "Anonymous in The Real World, "sherlock40", "GW66, and "the Troubador". Another selfish wife that thinks only of herself story. How original. Sorry I read it.
fuck ass w/o a name it's a damn story
he can't seperate fact (real life) from fiction! Great stroy!
nice
MORE!
Nope
Just another story about a wimp husband and a whore wife. In a perfect world she would get a good case of aids and they would both rot to death........... but the section is LOVING WIVES, not naughty wives, no wonder you can't write, you can't friggin read! PA actually stand for pathetic affairs???
Dear funsie
Don't be perplexed. This is nothing more than a stroke story - well actually much worse.
There isn't anyone or you here to like or relate to. It isn't arousing or erotic just sickly disrespectful to the self cuckster and us.
You gotcher wimpish cuck who likes to watch or hear about his ho fucking real men. No one could respect him as a cuckish wimpy pimp least of all his ho.
So kind of a waste of everyone's time except for the very few into male self humiliation and disrespect.
Not much funsie huh. You can do better - if you wanted to.
DON'T BE PERPLEXED...
as a first time writer, you may not be aware of the multitude of mindless morons that leave "comments" about the FANTASY STORIES on this site. Simply ignore and forgive them their ranting as their collective intelligence is equivalent to that of a slug. Continue your writing and have some fun!
Didn't
Care for this one, I didn't find it at all erotic as this wife is nothing more than a slut. I didn't see any love at all in this story.
Well Done
Not my style but well executed!
Please
MORE, MORE, MORE please.
Awfull
Hey, what can be sexier for a woman than a man slapping her pussy and than quickly jerking in her? I am not sure which was a bigger turn off the "erotic" description or the lame dialogue. I sincerely feel sorry for those who find this an exciting fantasy... How bad could their real sex life be?
what?
Difficult to read.
One word
I liked your story -- well, most of it. Of course, as with all stories in Literotica some editing would help. One question, and it stems from one word: "slut. " I know that I'm not as experienced with women as are you and other writers here. But in my experience, I've found that there is no greater turn off for a woman than to be called a slut, especially when she is in that delicious phase of initial excitement. Yet, over and over in Literotica the male characters use the word freely and the women seem to lap it up and upon hearing it move onto the road of earth-shaking orgasms. Of course this is fiction -- we all know that; yet, some verisimiltude would be refreshing. No?
Great!
Loving the way he did her from behind whilst clothed!
5*****
Loved it, more please. Paul
Absolute Garbage
Fucking cheating whore cunt. I don't care what kind of marriage they have. I won't read any further.
5*s for the plot but erotic aspect was a bit lacking (overall 4 *s)
There is a brigade of shit talkers for every Loving Wife story. Take it as a compliment that they targeted you. What they fear the most is a wife who cheats on her husband with another man who happens to be richer, or higer on social ladder, or has a bigger dick, or is her husband's creditor (e.g. landlord ho wad not paod) & last bit not least if the other man is husband's boss.
This is a story, it's fiction. There are many readers who find them excing. i am one of them. I love to read that the wife wants another man. You wrote from the outset that she is submissive. you told us readers that her husband and her have an open prelationship. Furthermore you told the readers that the wife felt sexual attraction towards his boss. we new she loves sex with hubby or somebody else. we were told by the author she fancies poerful men. the boss had a radar of sorts to sense she wants him. he was brazen, she was happy to oblige. The boss loves the fact she is submissive. there are many women who want their husband or lover to talk dirty to them & treat them like sluts. but to get her to bed you must be a gentlemen to the power of square! In real life they first must trust you and be totally comfortable with you. (I loved a woman like that. i still carry the most beutiful memories in my heart, which is still healing!)
to betrayedbylove re his/her comment on 10/10/13
This paragraph is boring & feel free to skip it. I do not know whether your user name stems from a bad experience or you just picked it up. i shall presume that your love and trust were betrayed by a woman, probably your wife or ex-wife.
You are too strict, totally one-sided, & you are not allowing any leeway for human diversity. No 2 persons are the same, 2 sisters who grew up in the same family can be totally different in terms of character. There is a life story for every human being on Earth.
My first wife was cheating on me when i was in my late 20's. it was happening in a small community (population 3,500) & i was the only one who did not know. i could not free or liberate myself from the experience before i truly forgave her. I never told her 'i forgive you' or something. i forgave her in my heart & could get on with my life without baggage. I remarried. In your play-book i will be classified as a sick fuck or something after i tell you the following: it always turned me on when other men were hitting on my wife or my girlfriend. i was getting a kick out of the situation each and every time. I was happy if people were ogling her. & with the hindsight (which tends to be 20/20) i would say that my first marriage would have lasted much longer had we lived in a large city that offers anonymity and room for discretion. May be, just may be, i would have discovered, a set free, a hitherto latent side of my personality and sexuality.
i would not be reading loving wife stories if i hated the notion. My alternative life could have included a 'charming wife' like Kevin had. & just may be, i would be looking forward to hearing full detail about the quicky in the back yard just 50 - 100 ft from other people.
in light of the fact we are limited to one life, may be (just may be) it helps when we imagine the alternative life story.
Last but not least, we must know that souls of other people carry the same burden as ours do, and may be at a similar crossroad in their respective lives, each of them made a different decision out of strength or wakness or lack of real choice. let them be, my friend, for each (of us) has to carry his own cross (whether we are Christian or Jewish or Muslim or Hindu or agnostics)...
Hey Anonymous who commented on betrayedbylove
You are a sissy little faggot who is gay. Go back in your hole and suck off your boyfriend. Your probably the Cunt who wrote this shit. To bad your feelings got hurt. Boo hoo. Just fuck off and die.
Utterly tremendous
Well done. A really exciting and sexy account, so well writtena dn explained. Straight to the faves list for me LOL x x
You are very, very talented.. and I think I hate you LOL (only kidding x)
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