It was not a bad story, but it moved awfully fast. I figured she was going to tease him a little and show some skin. The sex happened too quickly and it wasn't really believable. I know this is fantasy and you had a good story, but you didn't take enough time to set up good characters. Again, not bad, keep writing!
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Anonymous10/05/13
OMG
Jessie is that you baby? You don't know how many times I've jerked off watching you through the window, or do you? I know you've seen my 'accidental' exposures. Thanks for noticing baby. If I touch you just so tonight, well maybe we'll move on from the imagination!
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Decent story
It was not a bad story, but it moved awfully fast. I figured she was going to tease him a little and show some skin. The sex happened too quickly and it wasn't really believable. I know this is fantasy and you had a good story, but you didn't take enough time to set up good characters. Again, not bad, keep writing!
OMG
Jessie is that you baby? You don't know how many times I've jerked off watching you through the window, or do you? I know you've seen my 'accidental' exposures. Thanks for noticing baby. If I touch you just so tonight, well maybe we'll move on from the imagination!
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