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Nice!
I enjoyed the descriptive quality.
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Dear me I enjoy fishing with all that is going on around me sitting in the countryside , but now you have made me feel sorry for the fish!
This is an interesting poem
that has, for me, a faint but twisted echo of Yeats' "Song of Wandering Aengus". I am puzzled about a couple things, though, like how the "frigid mountain stream" morphs into a "muddied soup." Granted, a mountain stream could be muddy, but that isn't my usual image, and "stream" implies movement to me whereas "soup" implies stillness.
The other point is the choice of the word "sanguine," presumably to describe the fish as reddish. But sanguine also means cheerful or optimistic and that creates some confusion for me in the reading.
Which may of course, be good. Nice poem.
Lovely moment
beautifully caught. There are a couple of changes I would suggest, but nothing major.
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