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Love Renewed Ch. 02

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by Anonymous06/25/08

good story but...

it would be better if you got an editor to iron out the kinks in your grammar and punctuation. Good luck!

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by Anonymous06/25/08

Kinks?

the kinks in most of the grammar is intentional. for example one of the characters says some thing like "don't be gettning smart wit me" in my opinion it shows emotion.
story is great.

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