You have a well written story.The couple seem very life like,and the story reads very easy.The sex scenes are vivid,as if I could see, what you were writting about, in my minds eye.
I think the story is sad though,It's a shame that she couldn't settle,for just him,instead of spending her young life searching for something she already has.....Rich
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Anonymous09/08/08
Yes, sad
Flynns twin! I agree with the other comment. So very well written. But she seems very selfish. Why does she think she can't have both? It seems in real like it's the male that can't see what's staring him in the face. An interesting change up. What is she doing as she's 'seeing the world'? Every erotica story doesn't need a happy ending. I love when writers can say so much with few words, and you've done that. Awesome.
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Very Good!
Nice story, well written, Thanks!
A well written but sad story
You have a well written story.The couple seem very life like,and the story reads very easy.The sex scenes are vivid,as if I could see, what you were writting about, in my minds eye.
I think the story is sad though,It's a shame that she couldn't settle,for just him,instead of spending her young life searching for something she already has.....Rich
Yes, sad
Flynns twin! I agree with the other comment. So very well written. But she seems very selfish. Why does she think she can't have both? It seems in real like it's the male that can't see what's staring him in the face. An interesting change up. What is she doing as she's 'seeing the world'? Every erotica story doesn't need a happy ending. I love when writers can say so much with few words, and you've done that. Awesome.
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