Nice read! Well thought out, and constructed. Continue in that way and you'll develop a good following. my only suggestion is "lengthen the next chapter." I loved it.
Nice, smooth and none of the long drawn out "maybes" in other stories. They have a lot in common and your characters are doing it naturally. Please continue the good work.
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Anonymous12/31/09
unrealistic
to unrealistic for me you say they are twins yet they don't get along even though they share a bedroom and thier parents are never home and they have to rely on each other thats all fine and good but if true no way would she be getting into bed with him during a storm or any other time keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic and believable please
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Anonymous11/13/11
mmmmmmmm! what a hot story! fucking a sister is so nice! i used to fuck my sister in sleep.
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Anonymous03/08/12
Not smart
I want to like your character, but if he knows fucking his sister is taboo he's gotta know cumming inside her is bigger. He should have pulled out.
English
Nice
very good first story please give us more
Want a sequel
Great!! Go on, make it a sequel.
Maybe baby ??! Additional parts Please !!
The way it starts it seems to be a story that leads to the start of a new family.
Like brother and sister going to college as a young couple.
Next chapter, Please!
Nice read! Well thought out, and constructed. Continue in that way and you'll develop a good following. my only suggestion is "lengthen the next chapter." I loved it.
YES!
keep going! It was very good!
more...more...more
man, that was a great story!
More!
Definitely write more. That was great!
GREAT
I JACKED OFF THE WHOLE WAY IT WAS GREAT JUST GO MORE INTO DETAIL ON THE SEX PARTS
well
I'd certainly love to see more
Of course, u continue...
...& he hopes 4 a helluvalot more storms!
definitly more
i wonder what would happen if mom walked in?
From the Old Dog
Nice, smooth and none of the long drawn out "maybes" in other stories. They have a lot in common and your characters are doing it naturally. Please continue the good work.
unrealistic
to unrealistic for me you say they are twins yet they don't get along even though they share a bedroom and thier parents are never home and they have to rely on each other thats all fine and good but if true no way would she be getting into bed with him during a storm or any other time keep it atleast sounding somewhat realistic and believable please
mmmmmmmm! what a hot story! fucking a sister is so nice! i used to fuck my sister in sleep.
Not smart
I want to like your character, but if he knows fucking his sister is taboo he's gotta know cumming inside her is bigger. He should have pulled out.
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