All Comments on 'The Office Ch. 01'

The only criticism I can offer is that you go a bit overboard trying not to use the same word twice. Sometimes over-creativity with word choice can detract from the mood of a story, I think your writing suffers from this danger a bit. Nonetheless, the story is a good read and, as I mentioned, the photo is amazing - a creative shot of a beautiful woman.

what a horny lady!

His "20th floor office" and they look thru the window?

i loved this, i climaxed so quick reading this! nice

I know it's odd that my focus was on the writing style and technical aspects, but I'm a woman, so I was able to multi task. ;D

This was extremely well written, and I really enjoyed the descriptions and beauty of the written word.

...and the story was very hot as well. :3

loved the pic... there's more i hope..

loved it.....keep them coming please!

Very erotic and extremely well written. Has Karenistic no more chapters to add?

The secretary knew what her boss wanted, from the meeting time and place to the clean up after. Too bad she left them in a mess. Great story.

More...more....MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Mmmmmm. Tasty stuff! More please.

one picture counts as illistrated??????

The descriptions of the raw sex and the illustration are so well done! Draining, to say the least!

There should be a sequel, but? darn!

Best part cumming inside woman knocking her up from 2 cocks in her cunt samtime