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by cryforhelp07/26/08

Good style, bit short on the buildup and setting

I liked you writing, it was completely faultless, which made it a pleasant read. Obviously it's been competently edited.

The story doesn't really "pull me in", probably because I can't really emphasize with michael, and a lack of setting around him.

I'll read chapter 2 now, please keep it up!

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