All Comments on 'Teacher's Pet'

by thelimeyfromhell

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AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Learn to use contractions

I could not get past the first "It is for you". Can not you use contractions?

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
I agree with the previous comment

An okay story shot down by poor writing. The contractions were part of the problem.<p>I also found some howlers:<p><p>"Her 38B breast had dark brown nipples" - One breast with multiple nipples? freak show!<br>"A women I had wanked over" - She is a weeemin! like the drunk in Mrs Winterbourne.<p>Not that bad, but please use an editor.

epiphany65epiphany65over 15 years ago
good story

On the whole, I enjoyed this -- although I would have liked to have seen more build-up and tension between the narrator & Mrs. Jones before they had sex. It reminded me of a couple of teachers I lusted for in high school. The music references made me smile. Perhaps "Slap and Tickle" should have been playing at the end. :-) I do agree with the previous posters' criticism though, but don't let that deter you from continuing to write. The more you write, the better you'll get. Keep at it!

AnonymousAnonymousover 15 years ago
Mother & Daughter...

...at the same time?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Was it?

Was that his child??

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Proofreader?

You need a new proofreader.

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