by regularguy13
The story is imaginative and engaging. ....
But some words are used terribly, perhaps betraying a lack of reading experience by the author. Spell checker cannot flag homonyms or entirely wrong word choices.
For example, ... Tyler quickly stepped backwards ending their elicit contact. ===> their illicit contact. ....
elicit .. verb transitive .. to cause a reaction ....
illicit .. adjective .. (Encarta) unacceptable by prevailing social standards. .... This is why an editor is needed. These comments are not nit-picking, since such errors invite disrespect and ridicule for the author. Get a little help and greatly raise the output quality level.
lol the short chapters are just a tease. smarten up you could join them all into one larger one. good though I hope Brenda shows the twins a thing or 2 about there bodies