All Comments on 'Twins Saved by Nudity Ch. 03'

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mBrowmBrowover 15 years ago
Good story, needs editor

The story is imaginative and engaging. ....

But some words are used terribly, perhaps betraying a lack of reading experience by the author. Spell checker cannot flag homonyms or entirely wrong word choices.

For example, ... Tyler quickly stepped backwards ending their elicit contact. ===> their illicit contact. ....

elicit .. verb transitive .. to cause a reaction ....

illicit .. adjective .. (Encarta) unacceptable by prevailing social standards. .... This is why an editor is needed. These comments are not nit-picking, since such errors invite disrespect and ridicule for the author. Get a little help and greatly raise the output quality level.

LUSTYWHEELSLUSTYWHEELSabout 13 years ago

lol the short chapters are just a tease. smarten up you could join them all into one larger one. good though I hope Brenda shows the twins a thing or 2 about there bodies

armando100armando100over 5 years ago
really nice!

liked the story a lot.

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